Getting advice from older friends is more valuable than from the friends of the same age as yours
Advice, an essential element in life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether older friends can offer more valuable advice to people than friends of the same age do. Getting advice from friends of similar age, in some people’s views, is preferable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that seeking advice from old friends is superior, due to the contribution to personal life and career development.
What must be prioritized is that older friends, rather than friends of similar age, can give us helpful advice about personal life, including diet and stress-eliminating approaches. To begin with, it is the elder friends whose advice about diet is beneficial to people. To be more concise, elderly friends can give people sound advice like eating organic food, whole-grain food, and whole-fiber food, since they lead a wholesome lifestyle; on the other hand, leading an unwholesome lifestyle, friends of similar age cannot offer people advice about food, and even give wrong advice, such as eating sugared soda, chocolate, and dairy products. Furthermore, people can seek advice about how to reduce stress from elderly friends. In detail, older friends, compared with friends of similar age, know numerous stress-shrinking strategies like doing Tai Chi, going hiking, and going jogging, helping people lower stress levels; by contrast, pressure cannot be reduced after people seek advice from friends of the same age, because these friends usually lead a hectic lifestyle and cannot exclude themselves from daily worries and concerns as well.
What is equally worth discussing is that people can get professional advice about career development from older friends, rather than from similar-age friends, including how to secure employment and increase the chances of promotion in career. First of all, elder friends offer people helpful advice about searching for jobs. Specifically, they can teach people how to wear formal attires and convince interviewers, thus allowing people to create a positive impression on interviewers; on the contrary, getting advice about finding jobs from friends of similar age is extremely difficult because they either lack experience or have hard time securing a job. Moreover, never can we ignore that elder friends can give advice about how to increase the chances of promotion in the workplace. To explain it further, their advice will help people earn respect and admiration and win the support and assistance from colleagues, even enabling people to move up the promotion ladder, because elderly friends know how to communicate with different types of workers; in contrast, with similar-age friends lacking communication skill, people cannot get such advice from them.
Personal life, an essential element, will be improved through the advice older friends give. Career development, the foundation for people’s lives, will be facilitated after people ask elderly friends for advice. In conclusion, only through older friends can people get practical advice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50425531915 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72548540828 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.482680445 60.3974514979 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.6875 118.986275619 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.21951772744 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431325044993 0.243740707755 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187319096468 0.0831039109588 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862846893897 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322293388357 0.150359130593 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104885574948 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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