Government officials are placed on their job in order to provide services for the county, state or nation which they serve and its people. While it makes sense for government officials to base their decisions on their own judgement rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people, I think that the proper answer lies on the situation it is applied to. Firstly, if officials were to rely solely on their judgement for passing of a law it could possibly lead to revolts.
Despite it making sense that government officials should rely only on their own judgement, this could possibly lead to revolts by the public. For example, let's say that the government officials in charge of deciding whether to allow Homosexual Marriage decline the bill and neglect the people's will. This would lead to revolts, a disadvantageous situation, by homosexual activists creating a less democratic nation and hindering the freedom rights. Of course, if the decision came after much deliberation between the officials and government then revolts can be avoided and a different, more accepted, decision could be passed instead which would be advantageous.
Additionally, there are situations where government officials should rely solely on their own judgement. For instance, if a city is to receive a new school or a new park, and the people of the city want a new park then, then the government official, a mayor, should take the decision based on their own judgement. Since, the people of the city might not know how bad the current school structure and there might be parks in the city which were recently built, therefore the mayor should act only based on their on judgement of what can improve the city. If the mayor had decided to listen to the people's will unquestioningly then it could have lead to no improvement in education sector of the city leading to worse economic conditions for the city.
Over all, based on the situation and circumstances government officials should be take their decisions on their own or with the peoples' will taken into account. Since, some decisions for the people require the peoples' thoughts and emotions while other do not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 451, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...their judgement for passing of a law it could possibly lead to revolts. Despite it making s...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... rely only on their own judgement, this could possibly lead to revolts by the public. For exam...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taken'?
Suggestion: taken
...mstances government officials should be take their decisions on their own or with th...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'take' or 'be taken'?
Suggestion: take; be taken
...s on their own or with the peoples will taken into account. Since, some decisions for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01108033241 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74680524158 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484764542936 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1660971455 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.153846154 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7692307692 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258024407534 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108393125224 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065698834642 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175912814512 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456343610846 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.