Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
The issue is whether or not bureaucratic should invest as much in the arts as they do in army. I strongly defy government should finance as much in the arts as they do in military, and behind this disagreement, mine following reasons mentioned below:
Firstly, For country protection their military should be powerful otherwise it hamper for nation. Military consummate government invest because military need burden weapon, and also need pure healthy food for army fitness. For instance, India army include in top-3 rank in the world, so India governments should take care of their army fitness and also provide latest weapon to stay in top-3.
Secondly, In nation they need more fund rather than other. Because nation military have three categorizes: Air-force(Protect Both Navy plus Army), NAVY(protect seas side area), and India Army(To protect border of country). For this 3 categorizes nation need a burden amount to buy new fighter plane, submarine and weapon. Country also have Nuclear bomb and it is costly. For example, India has less nuclear weapon than USA, So If India want to buy a nuclear weapon from any country they need a massive fund to buy nuclear weapon.
In the whole, The original statement is veracity. Bureaucratic should finance more in military rather than others. Because In military need a huge amount of finance, and also for army fitness they need pure healthy food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue is whether or not bureaucratic should invest as much in t...
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Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hampers'?
Suggestion: hampers
...ilitary should be powerful otherwise it hamper for nation. Military consummate governm...
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Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'provide the latest'.
Suggestion: provide the latest
...ake care of their army fitness and also provide latest weapon to stay in top-3. Secondly, I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.3162921348 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 58.6224719101 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1171.0 2235.4752809 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 230.0 442.535393258 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09130434783 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.55969084622 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57128611542 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 215.323595506 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 704.065955056 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1720654814 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5833333333 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2554180563 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101671375597 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152835462305 0.0758088955206 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210244718796 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.245757926277 0.0667264976115 368% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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