Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Government of the previous centuries apparently spent more in the military as compared to the military nowadays. However, countries like Finland, Iceland spend an absolute zero in their military. The prompt claims that government investment in arts must be tantamount to their investment in military. Does that mean that the peace loving countries spend nothing to develop art? However, in a not so quixotic world, most countries spend largely in the military and less in the art. I mostly agree with the claim on the basis of two specific circumstances.

Good arts last forever while war, which can engendered by military ego in opposing countries, is a bad memory or a peice of disgrace for the country. Art museums in Paris still boasts the great painting of Pastiche and Piccaso. However, one of my German friend saw Hitler's regime in Germany as the forgettable history of his country. Similarly, writing of Shakespheare are as prevalent today as it were 200 years ago but war and military tactics of Genghis Khan may only be found on the history books. Since art perpetuates forever, a good art can be a country's greatest recognition, the country should spend considerably on its art form.

Military exercise entails fear across borders. Whole Japan is off their feet when N. Korea tests one of its "small" nuclear bombs. A good peice of art unites people. While India and Pakistan are always on the verge of war, music of Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan and Jagjit Singh fractionally unite them. Even they are fighting on bureacratic level, their soul demands the similar art form. Military , which is generally used in mass destruction, brings no good for both sides. While developing art is not like opening a gun factory, art requires people to be more creative. Hence government should focus on providing funds to artist so they wouldn't have to abjure their art for a living.

According to Maslow's Heirarchy of needs, a person's basic need is more important than their intellectual needs. Basic need which includes food, shelter, safety are the major prioriy of humans and other need cannot be fulfilled without theswe needs. For example, can we imagine a great artist emerging from a war stricken region? Although, there might be some exceptions, most people cannot concentrate on other needs unless his life is not safe. In such specific conditions, there is no apparent reason to invest in art.

In conclusion, different government spend different amount for their military. Investment on art can be forever and it binds people across borders

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, hence, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07075471698 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70641836123 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577830188679 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4555198414 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.6296296296 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7037037037 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59259259259 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246802604952 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655343213081 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810695034452 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143307886109 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598383991744 0.0667264976115 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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