Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and support

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Art is an essential part of people's way of life; it enables a people to better understand their cultural heritage and better identify with who they are. However, if there is any sector that is more important to the existence of a country, and thereby deserves more funding from the government than the Art sector, it is the military sector.
A country that does not have the capacity to defend it denizens and resources, from both internal and external hostile forces, is more prone to attacks that may end up resulting in the country's collapse. When there is no country or perhaps the country is being piloted by external forces, art would be the last thing on the mind of the citizens. Like a fairly popular saying goes, a government that cannot protect the lives and properties of its citizens does not deserve to be called a government.
Although, people might want to argue that when art is well funded, it can be used as a platform to enlighten the citizen and instill patrotism into the general populace and, therefore, should be funded more, however, there are numerous ways by which the art sector can generate income (such as tourism and ticket prices on exhibition) and maintain self-sustanance. The military does not have that luxury of options and mainly depends on the government of the country. Government are therefore expected to live up to the expectation and provide adequate funds for the military.
Lastly, the funds needed to fund the military of a country, on an average is much more than the one needed by the Art sector. Even light ammunitions like hand thrown grenades and pistol gun cost several thousands of dollars, not to talk of heavy ammunitions like fighter jets and submarines which command millions of dollars and several years for assembling them. Looking at the facts above; the superior importance of the military, the fact that arts can source for money from other sources while the military mainly depends on the government, and the military's need for more funds, the government of various countries should appropriate more funds to their military sectors.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, lastly, look, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91549295775 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59573452622 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549295774648 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.243740262 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.636363636 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2727272727 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126109237406 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480367969944 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267972787385 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770441543109 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368722730334 0.0667264976115 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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