GRE sample issue pool essay topic 54
Many important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author asserts that most of the inventions that brings significant changes are accidental and we find solution to one question while trying to solve another. I agree that many discoveries that we are enjoying now were result of anomalous findings of our efforts to decipher different puzzle. The prompt is indeed valid for many cases; however, to conclude that most findings are by chance is to undermine the talents and efforts of those involved continuously to solve the problems.
To begin, I concede that many important results are unintentional. The universe is a huge box of mysteries: when we try to open it, there is the possibility that we could get additional elements along with the one we were looking for and sometimes we get entirely different matter than we expected. To take an instance, the confirmation of famous theory of relativity came by chance when Einstein was trying to figure out mass-energy relationship. When Einstein noticed that his perception of mass varied to someone sitting next to him, the idea struck him which led to the discovery of relativistic mechanics. Furthermore, the discovery of diamond mines in Africa while searching for gold, the accidental detection of Pluto while studying the Saturn through telescope might be some of the examples to reference for the author's assertion.
Moreover, it is advantageous as well to decipher another side of any riddle while trying to find something else. We can get different perception to the question and different sets of applications could be analyzed along with the originally intended answer. If we get both sets of creations or even more while trying to find one thing, then the universe will indeed be in debt.
However, to emphasize that the discoveries are merely the result of accident is to weaken the continuous efforts and intellect of the individuals trying to figure out the solution. Some theory takes years to be proved, some discoveries are miles away from being detected. Still the people involved provide their tireless efforts to find the solution. Most of the findings that are unintentional are still close to the one the person intended originally. The mass-energy relation, which Einstein originally wanted to figure out is the base for theory of relativity which is the accidental. To say relativity is accidental findings is to challenge Einstein's whole life's achievement. Furthermore, there are so many inventions that are not accidental. The discovery of Enigma machine by Alan Turing, the creation of Iphone, the recent development of reusable rocket by Elon Musk is his persistent effort to the field and all these findings are equally important to the world as are the accidental ones.
To sum up, the author is right that many discoveries are accidental and unintentional. These discoveries have redefined the world as well. However, many other originally intended inventions have had the same impact as the accidental ones and are not far from the one found unknowingly. Further, it is not fair to the individuals providing their entire devotion to the cause to say that their findings have deviated and are not what they intend to look for.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, well, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10597302505 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8734041448 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470134874759 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.958606273 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.217391304 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5652173913 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178222816745 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522215037915 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326801771896 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103876912285 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116354038341 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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