Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Choosing the field of study is a difficult decision for any student, be it a high school elective or a graduation degree. This choice could be a lot easier if the educational institute counsel the student first about all the fields uninterestedly. The prompt suggests that the institutions should guide the students towards those fields that have profitable careers. However, I mostly disagree with the prompt for following two reasons.
Firstly, in this constantly changing world, where use of internet is growing profusely, it is not great option to choose among the money making careers. In addition, there are huge mass of people who are running a race to find a secure career which will allow them to afford affluent lifestyle. This makes it difficult for students to accurately predict whether the lucrative career in present will yield the promised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first computer was invented, educational institutions mainly highlighted the hardware portion of computer science causing more people opting for hardware engineering. Later after five to six years, the demand for hardware engineers were minimum with very high competition. Thus, it is essential to focus on the right option to study rather than preparing for lucrative careers.
Further, to achieve success in life person should have passion for what they do in life. Steve Jobs in one of his interview said “ To be best one among huge mass, you have to know your passion. Otherwise, everything you do will be enervating task for you”. As suggested by one of the legends, who followed his passion and become successful in every part of the field he worked on. It is essential to have interest to work relentlessly. Moreover, we can also exemplify boxer Mohamad Ali, who was world champion for many years, loved what he choose to do throughout his life and thus made him successful. There are many other personalities like Warren Buffet, Bill Gates who were drop out but they excelled in whatever they did because they loved what they did. Therefore, it is essential to love the work you do rather than educational institution teaching you which career path to follow.
This choice differs from person to person and cannot be generalized to all people by looking at some few cases. However, Educational institutes should first encourage students to choose their field of study according to their passion and then move towards the lucrative career.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... present will yield the promised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: IN_1990s[2]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1990’s'.
Suggestion: during the 1990’s
...romised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first computer was invented, educa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
... Jobs in one of his interview said “ To be best one among huge mass, you have to know y...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... champion for many years, loved what he choose to do throughout his life and thus made...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dropped'.
Suggestion: dropped
...like Warren Buffet, Bill Gates who were drop out but they excelled in whatever they ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0962962963 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67184682048 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58024691358 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8974581273 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.2 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321878204578 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930023940514 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744869929447 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188035219816 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134948612684 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... present will yield the promised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: IN_1990s[2]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1990’s'.
Suggestion: during the 1990’s
...romised amount in future. For instance, during 1990’s when first computer was invented, educa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
... Jobs in one of his interview said “ To be best one among huge mass, you have to know y...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
... champion for many years, loved what he choose to do throughout his life and thus made...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dropped'.
Suggestion: dropped
...like Warren Buffet, Bill Gates who were drop out but they excelled in whatever they ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0962962963 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67184682048 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58024691358 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8974581273 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.2 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321878204578 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930023940514 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744869929447 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188035219816 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134948612684 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.