A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
I agree with the recommendation and support the case somewhere in the middle as same curriculum for every students will atleast create a community that has a basic understanding of overall subject matters and issues going on nationally or globally.
However, every person has their own thought process, wishes, passions and desires. They need to be able to nurture their passion from the very young age in order to achieve the goal in the future. This particular way of thinking forces me to disagree with the recommendation because if a child is not allowed to pursue his desired path and is forced to follow path different than his thoughts, then the diversion can be severe. We can see this deviation in the third world countries where students are required to follow the same curriculum. This has created a hinderance in the successful people in diverse fields and all the heights are achieved in a narrow course of fields.
But, providing the same curriculum also has its merits. Some of the schools where the curriculum varies for all the children, has produced very poor outcomes in the sense of general knowledge. If a situation arises, where different people studying different curriculum are to be evaluated in the same pool, there have to a common ground where they can be tested. But different curriculum in a nation is going to make this task difficult. Also, we have many examples of people who have followed the same curriculum as others and have succeeded and became the epitome of success.
Evaluating throughout my thought, My bias shifts towards the support of the recommendation as I have closely observed the achievements of people, their overall knowledge on all the fields who are the products of this very system, where the curriculum is same throughout the nation until the school level ends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... and is forced to follow path different than his thoughts, then the diversion can be...
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Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...he same curriculum also has its merits. Some of the schools where the curriculum varies for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97712418301 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73894618799 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.2292348269 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.916666667 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189910548605 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709890507184 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472713775666 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123478884204 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361583622575 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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