increasing rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves
In the world of hustle and bustle everyone is busy making more money. Money has become the fourth basic necessity along with food, clothing and shelter. Everyone wants to be rich and everyone wants to be successful. But with increasing success, the lifestyle changes completely which can cause numerous problems. I strongly agree with the given statement that, the increasing rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves. Technological advancements and development has made human life easier but along with solving the pre exixsting problems it creates more problems. The reasons for my agreement on the given statement are the personal, economical, social and technological factors.
Firstly, a rapid pace of a personal life can affect the individual in adverse ways, for instance, a person who wants to be rich in a short span of time will do overtime after the office hours or he will accept extra assignments which will result into a less social life. He will be completing his office work even at home. This will fetch him more income compared to his colleagues. But it will also make him workoholic. Also, because of overtime there is a possibility of increased blood pressure and hypertension and other health problems. All these problems will curtail his chances to secure a good position in the near future. With this example, i support my agreement on the given statement on personal grounds.
Secondly, there are environmental factors as well which worsen the existing problems and create new problems in the very need of coping up with the rapid pace of life. To meet the consumer demands, manufacturers tend to install new production plants for expanding their business and profit. For this very reason, they buy the agricultural lands from farmers and start their production plants on these green lands by offering the farmers some lucarative deals. This will surely increase their revenue, also the increasing demand it met, but it creates pollution. Pollution in return causes several problems. Another example of environmental factor creating new problems because of rapid pace of life is the water logging in the Indian railway tracks during monsoon. This also disrupts the daily life of students, employees and other commuters. Thus, i agree to the given statement on environmental factors.
Thirdly, with techonological advancement with every passing day, which is making the human life easier also has some adverse after effects which innvolve the poor health of children. Their sluggishness due to no outdoor games dilates a risk of welcoming severe health problems at a very early age. Also, development in computer an mobile games have created severe problems. For instance, games were created for the amusement and entertainment purpose but there are games like, the blue whale game. which have led to many suicidal cases of children. Also, metro cities are heavily populated. Every other person owns a vehicle to commute. This results into traffic and pollution of these cities. Thus, i agree to the given statement on technological grounds as well.
To conclude, if the parents are not just money minded, and they do not maintain the rapid pace of life for only monetary reasons, they will have plenty of leisure time. which they can spend with their kids, this will help them shape up a bright future for their kids. Also, they will have a good health. Thus, i agree that, the increasing rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2923.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08347826087 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62271594752 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481739130435 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 917.1 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6954894745 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5142857143 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65714285714 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310822563539 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757580477077 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145415381389 0.0758088955206 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191674142722 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113710536654 0.0667264976115 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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