The speaker claims that investing in technologies that are life savers is more important than investing in technologies that serve the purpose of luxuriousness and entertainment. However, I tend to agree with the author, and in the next three paragraphs, I will explain the reasons for my position.
Firstly, investing in life-saving technologies should be an utmost priority when making investments. Consider major sicknesses such as AIDS, Cancer, deadly viruses, etc. that cause the death of millions of people every year. Yet, our medical science failed to succeed in discovering remedies for these ailments. Consider Covid-19, a deadly virus that causes millions of lives worldwide in 2020 because of the lack of vaccine. If there were vaccines for these deadly diseases, hundreds of millions of people could be saved yearly. So, in such grave scenarios, no need beats the purpose of investing in life-saving technologies.
Moreover, even if we consider respective values of investments in a different sector, we see that the values created by investments in life-saving technologies outperform the investments in other sectors like luxury or entertainment. The demand for luxuries and entertainment only arises when there is a certain economic and healthy situation. People only feel the need for luxuries or entertainment when their basic necessities are fulfilled. One who lives off his day to day income does not think of the luxuries or entertainment. However, they still go to the hospital when they are sick, regardless of their income, use technologies that are life-savers. Considering billions of people living under the poverty line, it is fair to conclude that investments in life-saving technologies create more value.
People tend to argue that investments in technologies that are related to luxuries or entertainment create more profit. But, one cannot deny the fact that the profits and values created by these investments are fickle, which changes over time with the demand of the market, whereas, the demand for investments in life-saving technologies is constant, making it more attractive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...or luxuries or entertainment when their basic necessities are fulfilled. One who lives off his da...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, whereas, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 329.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46200607903 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11292799038 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3849208341 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.705882353 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3529411765 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.499062085538 0.243740707755 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154968279748 0.0831039109588 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164643795166 0.0758088955206 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331436343789 0.150359130593 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993414093544 0.0667264976115 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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