It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
1. It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
If behaviors related to adhering to their belief infringe on human rights, sticking to one’s purpose is detrimental to society. To elaborate, IS members are jihadists, who adhere to an extreme interpretation of Sunni Islam and consider themselves the only true believer. They hold that the rest of the world is made up of unbelievers, who seek to destroy Islam, Justifying attacks against other Muslims and non-Muslims alike. They mercilessly have murdered people who are against their belief or sometimes they just killed innocent people without manifest reasons. This brutal activity is caused by adhering to the thought that their belief is only the truth. If they could respect other believers, they would not suppress other believers brutally. When his belief is harmful to human rights, it would be beneficial to give up one’s post on other people.
When his or her belief supports and protects human rights, people should not compromise their beliefs. For example, Gandhi was a leader of the Indian independence movement against British rule. Employing nonviolent civil disobedience, Gandhi led India to independence and inspired movements for civil rights and freedom across the world. If he gave up and compromised with the British government and enjoyed his convenient life, he could not lead the independence of India and influence the world. As this example shows, to advocate human rights, a person should hold on his or her belief.
Moreover, even though it sticks to own creed mars human rights to some degree, if it benefits whole society, a person should hold to his or her opinion. For example, Margaret Thatcher, who was the Prime Minister of the United Kingdom in 20th, emphasized deregulation, flexible labor markets, the privatization of state-owned companies, and reduction of the welfare. Many people resisted her policy to cut the welfare, she persisted on her philosophy. As a result of her policy, United Kingdom could escape from long and deep economic depression. Although her policy had harmed people in part because many people had suffered from reduced welfare and easy dismissal due to the flexible labor markets, it salvaged whole society from disastrous hire. Considering benefits to whole society by sacrificing some people, a leader should insist his or her belief if the leader can judge the current situation well.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, well, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21374045802 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72145701832 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539440203562 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9329987716 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.842105263 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52631578947 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111441344235 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460772499339 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795522782207 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132807626562 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136823571132 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.