It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The development of an individual’s set of beliefs starts from his or her childhood. Some individuals are not properly exposed to the social environment, whereas some are exposed too much to social activities. Thus, no person grows up as an adult to have identical set of beliefs, values, characters, etc. Therefore, it may be beneficial for some people to compromise their beliefs, whereas for others it may be harmful to compromise. In my opinion, it is difficult to generalize the stated claim for every individual on the globe, rather circumstances will be able to identify whether adhering to beliefs will be harmful or not.
To begin, some people grow up narrow minded and do not allow for anything to happen against their strong beliefs. Their beliefs are embedded so strongly in their cognizance that anything occurring against them, which may in fact be good, is wrong. Thus, not allowing their beliefs to change is harmful for them. For instance, consider a person who never had exposure to any type of cinema and brought up to be religious. If such a person starts watching movies, he will find extremely questionable behaviors on the screen such as extreme violence on TV; gunfights, actors jumping off from tall buildings, etc. This person will dislike such elements of violence shown on television, and if he or she adheres to his or her beliefs, he or she may miss out on the entertainment provided by the movies. These movies sometimes help individuals to refresh our monotonous mind and relieve our stresses. Thus, in such circumstances where an individual’s beliefs are not aligned with the society’s culture, compromising beliefs is not harmful.
In contrast, circumstances where the beliefs of a certain person are contradictory to the moral values of the society, then adhering to the extreme beliefs is harmful, even detrimental. For instance, if an leader of a country does not want the voices of the citizens to be heard, this type of leader has beliefs that are not good for the health of that country.
From above, it is safe to conclude that circumstances can identify whether compromising a belief is harmful or not. If a person has beliefs that are contradictory to the accepted moral values, then compromising is a must.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, as for, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99734748011 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95177200113 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493368700265 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4299343543 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.823529412 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127404436515 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483087649095 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384805218039 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863447469505 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00666471224543 0.0667264976115 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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