Leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them.
Leaders are people who can galvanize people towards certain goal, when there is a need of any change. Leaders are not created because they aspired to become a leader, rather they are created out of necessity. Though we cannot deny the fact that certain degree of aspiration is required to become a leader, need of a leader plays a major in pushing anyone towards that position . There are ample of evidence in history where situations, need of change and demand of anyone who can organize have given birth to well-known leaders.
Nelson Mandela, for example, was a simple man who wanted pursue a degree in law, and came to Johanesberg to achieve his dream of having a degree (very few people in his village had a degree). He never aspired to become a president of South Africa or simply a leader of any group; only thing that he wanted was a good degree and a secured job. However, when he arrived to the capital he came to terms with the oppression of British colonials, and how desperate South Africans were for freedom. This oppression and want of it’s removal needed a leader who could organize people to fight against the white regiment. This demand then created the freedom fighter- Nelson Mandela. Had there been no British rule in Africa, would Nelson Mandela be born as a “father of the nation” ? One can hardly say yes.
The critics of the above argument, however, might argue that the leaders are created so frequently in the world; almost every year a great leader is recognized in international platform. So , does the demand alone can explain the reason for such dramatic rise in number of leaders? Obviously yes. World is full of unsatisfied people, the rift between rich and poor, oppressor and oppressed is growing at astronomical pace. The only thing that most people want is change, and for that change people need to be organized, and organization always needs a leader. Without leader such organization is doomed to failure. In Hongkong, for instance, a huge demonstration is being organized; there is a great need of leader. However, without a distinct leader the protest and its outcome is in limbo.
Thus, our planet will never become a perfect place to stay for everyone. As long as we walk in same path as we are walking now, there will be dissatisfaction and need for change, and these changes will require leaders. So, we will have leaders in the future as we had in the past, but they won’t be produced by leadership classes(mere aspiration) but they will born out of demand (as they have in the past).
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78733031674 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60023985764 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511312217195 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4893761034 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.761904762 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239380919005 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727777624263 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705699146857 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14831430384 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675780089059 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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