Leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them.
Who is a leader? A leader is a person who is followed by others because of his or her charisma and ability to lead people in the right direction. The statement contends that leaders are created by the demands placed on them. Admittedly, the external stimulus is vital for a person to become a leader. However, the inherent qualities of a person that pertains to the leadership principles also contribute toward making a perfect leader. In my opinion, neither the basic qualities required to be an effective leader nor the demands placed by the environment in which we live can be considered the sole factor that contributes to make a person a better leader. It will be clear from the examples discussed below that a perfect blend of both is required.
A leader must exude qualities such as confidence, competence, integrity, and honesty above all to become a successful leader. A perfect blend of these inherent qualities along with the demands placed by the outer environment is what distinguishes a leader from the laity. In politics, a leader has fundamental accountability to cater to the demands of the people they lead. For instance, Martin Luther King Jr. and Mahatma Gandhi, lead civil disobedience movements in U.S. and India respectively. It was not only the demands of their time that spur them with the motivation to lead people but also the humiliation they themselves faced one way or the other was of significant importance. Mahatma Gandhi was pursuing a career as an advocate, it was the mistreatment he realized in South Africa, and the problems of his fellow countrymen that invoke the true leader in him. Although it is true that he was followed by people because of his principles or ideology, one cannot deny the importance of demands placed by all these external factors that contributed to making him such an effective leader.
Some may argue that in the corporate world, leaders are created by their personality traits that show their potential to lead the organization or even be a part of it. Indeed, it is true. However, it would be a mistake to overlook the fact that all the people working in the corporate world are presented with the same opportunities in the initial phase of their careers. Then, it comes down to the person's ability to take on these opportunities, and explore the problems of the industry. This presents another example where personal traits, in addition to the demands placed on a person lead him or her to become a leader.
In conclusion, one can say that both personality traits and demands placed by the surroundings equally take part to make a person into a leader. Needless to say, only the external stimulus alone without the shrewdness to realize the problems, and the courage to speak against what one feels is wrong, or only these personality traits without the demands and situations necessary to use them in analyzing the problem would not work to create a successful leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... such an effective leader. Some may argue that in the corporate world, leaders ar...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...eir careers. Then, it comes down to the persons ability to take on these opportunities,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.894 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81515541312 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2415013302 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.523809524 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8095238095 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400465462438 0.243740707755 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138042351147 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156474731091 0.0758088955206 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265281784525 0.150359130593 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769470983072 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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