Leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There is an old Chinese saying: "The times produce their heroes". A discussion about what creates leaders is important since leaders guide people's lives, such as governments and presidents. In my stance, I support that the certain situations provide certain leaders basing on the following reasons.
First of all, people's thinking changes with the time, so the times also shape the different leaders. To illustrate, provisional American president, Barack Obama, who is intelligent, honest, unbiased, and humorous. He is a black which group was categorized as slaves and definitely had no right to go to school and vote in the early America when dominated by whites. Therefore, nowadays with limitation of racism, a potential black person could be the American president, which would not even be thought in the past. Thus, the time plays an extreme essential role in creating leaders.
Moreover, the demands from people allows them to choose disparate leaders. When people desire to abandon poverty, they might tend to elect a head who is qualified in economy or who comes out a superb economy solution. On the other hand, if a country already has a wealthy life while rights of some groups are ignored, the country might come up with a head who dedicate one self's effort to equalism. Hence, the needs of people would decide what kind of person is their leader.
Finally, the situation in the moment also influence the types of the leaders a lot. For instance, if a news of a victim who suffer severe bully in the military goes on TV, publics will focus on the soldier's right. Then, if a person who stand up and fight for the soldier's right. Publics might tend to advocate the person because the empathy for the solider victim. In this way, the certain situation might affect the election and have the distinct result.
To sum up, all of the times, needs, and situations shapes the leaders. They all have a powerful influence of public's mind and render publics to elect or choose their leaders.
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a head who dedicate one self's effort to equalism
a head who dedicates one self's effort to equalism
a victim who suffer severe bully
a victim who suffers a severe bully
if a person who stand up and fight for the soldier's right.
if a person who stands up and fights for the soldier's right.
flaws:
Still need to discuss the internal attributes of leaders. If the people are not qualified as leaders, the demands will not work.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1608 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.743 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 24, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...their leader. Finally, the situation in the moment also influence the types of the leaders...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
... of the leaders a lot. For instance, if a news of a victim who suffer severe bully in ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 12, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...have the distinct result. To sum up, all of the times, needs, and situations shapes the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'first of all', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251295336788 0.240241500013 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.142487046632 0.157235817809 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0725388601036 0.0880659088768 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0388601036269 0.0497285424764 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0233160621762 0.0444667217837 52% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10103626943 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.020725388601 0.0406280797675 51% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.49587158362 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0259067357513 0.030933414821 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0103626943005 0.0016655270985 622% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.129533678756 0.0997080785238 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.020725388601 0.0249443105267 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0310880829016 0.0148568991511 209% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2000.0 2732.02544248 73% => OK
No of words: 339.0 452.878318584 75% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.89970501475 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.383480825959 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283185840708 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.159292035398 0.200843997647 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.094395280236 0.132149295362 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49587158362 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 219.290929204 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58407079646 0.48968727796 119% => OK
Word variations: 65.9911950372 55.4138127331 119% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.8421052632 23.380412469 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2632411724 59.4972553346 56% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.263157895 141.124799967 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8421052632 23.380412469 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.674092028746 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 46.160689334 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.82278481013 1.64882698954 111% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39618733201 0.391690518653 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10792878183 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0676095952483 0.077325440228 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.547368638151 0.547984918172 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118779210696 0.149214159877 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156462333727 0.161403998019 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731735813908 0.0892212321368 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.293311141533 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0243034974794 0.0692045440612 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244130967615 0.275328986314 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680589593339 0.0653680567796 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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