In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Studying poetry, novels, mythology, and literature could facilitate college students to become sophisticated people. A discussion of this topic is essential since it relates to the efficiency of education. In my stance, I support that mythology and literature should be subsumed into the required courses for students for the following reasons.
First of all, these types of literature provide readers distinct perspectives, which broaden the readers’ minds and thinking. After the readers comprehend different perspectives, when they deal with and process things, they might come up with more disparate methods and views, which might consider the other sides more than before. To illustrate, a wealthy student might not really understand the suffering and gloomy life of people who in need. Through reading novels which express vividly about both the detailed life style and the reason cause the pain of poors could aid the wealthy students apprehend the feeling of being poor.
Moreover, students might encounter great difficulties and dilemmas in the future which may cause they depress and do not know what to do. Some literature which record and portrait responses of the heroes when they face the horrible things or what do they do when they confront obstructions. Not only hero stories but also tragedies could aid readers to face their lives. For instance, in the tragedy, characters always encounter the dilemmas which cause lost no matter which side they choose. Although it has not happened in everyone's life, it happens in some people's real life. Therefore, if one pores over the literature which teach them to be strong when they lose their important things in their student life, they could be much tougher when they really meet the both dilemmas and barriers.
Finally, the way treating and studying mythology also help people a lot because there are copious mythology in people's life. Once they meet something which cannot easily find a cause or result, they might adopt the same means to approach and find out the truth. In the contrast, if students did not study mythology before, they might easily be disguised by lengthy and ornate words. Studying mythology offer students a method to process and analyze the things they do not know before, but not accept completely of what other people said. Hence, studying mythology aid students to think in a mature way.
To sum up, mythology and many kinds of literature could help people to think in a disparate way. To broaden one's mind and increase the person's perspective, studying literature and mythology allow the person to consider things thoroughly and render the person become a well-round one.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
It is off the topic somehow. Need to focus on 'all college students should be required to take courses'
questions like: should all college students take the courses? for examples, some college students are already well-rounded individuals, so maybe they don't need the course.
second, do they have time to take the courses?
third, what is the relation between the courses and well-rounded individuals?
....
while you changed the topic to :
In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to to read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2188 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.065 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.488 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.629 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 587, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a mature way" with adverb for "mature"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tudying mythology aid students to think in a mature way. To sum up, mythology and many kind...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a disparate way" with adverb for "disparate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f literature could help people to think in a disparate way. To broaden ones mind and increase the ...
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Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
.... To broaden ones mind and increase the persons perspective, studying literature and my...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249475890985 0.240241500013 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.159329140461 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0649895178197 0.0880659088768 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0566037735849 0.0497285424764 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0482180293501 0.0444667217837 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0859538784067 0.12292977631 70% => OK
Participles: 0.0188679245283 0.0406280797675 46% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.55253024767 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0272536687631 0.030933414821 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0062893081761 0.0016655270985 378% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0880503144654 0.0997080785238 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0293501048218 0.0249443105267 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0377358490566 0.0148568991511 254% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2675.0 2732.02544248 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 452.878318584 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19212962963 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386574074074 0.366273622748 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.300925925926 0.280924506359 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201388888889 0.200843997647 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127314814815 0.132149295362 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55253024767 2.79330140395 91% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 219.290929204 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 59.4357048086 55.4138127331 107% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.6 23.380412469 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5313458943 59.4972553346 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.75 141.124799967 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.380412469 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.674092028746 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 51.6925925926 51.4728631049 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.34126984127 1.64882698954 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425778048077 0.391690518653 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107909083089 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0861025304233 0.077325440228 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.538022598638 0.547984918172 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133612413987 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165018858184 0.161403998019 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507503488286 0.0892212321368 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.376480607856 0.385218514788 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0469402839394 0.0692045440612 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289509214064 0.275328986314 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024017130696 0.0653680567796 37% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
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Rates: 70.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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