In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The transition from the vacillating time period at school to the more clearer state of mind during college is what makes all the difference in the extent of restrictions being placed on the students in regard to the academic curriculum. As students approach the more specialized tenure of college, their thought process becomes more organized as to what in this world full of opportunities interests them the most. Hence, on very conspicuous grounds, I would like to disagree to the premise provided above that a restriction should be placed on college students to undertake a variety of courses which might not be related to their field of study.
First of all, I would like to argue that college is the time when students begin pursuing their interests with passion and zeal. Employing a significant number of excessive courses would rather be dilatory than beneficial. A student who is ecstatic to have discovered his hidden love for engineering and robotics and has already started putting his mind into how coding works, studying Leanardo Da Vinci’s complex prose and poetry would put him off completely. In fact, he might find it abstruse which would result in lowering down his overall grade. While aiming to make them well-rounded individuals, we would be restraining them from joining the work force as early as possible. Moreover, adding so many more compulsory subjects to the curriculum would indeed cause a significant rise in the cost of study, possibly unmanageable for some.
A pragmatic way out in this case would be to have elective courses at the dispensation of students. This way, students would be free to opt for other courses that interest them without being under a limitation from the college authorities. Apart from those quintessential subjects stated in the premise, college could even have a few subjects related to sports and exercise. Afterall, physical well-being and fitness also contributes to the making of well-rounded individuals.
However, going with my standpoint might result in some students being at a disadvantage such as those who decide not to go for literature and poetry subjects will lack complexity and range of vocabulary in their spoken and written language. Nevertheless, I think they still stand a chance of being equally successful as others since their fields of interest might not even require that kind of complex use of language. Take the example of this very GRE, some graduate schools such as one related to communicative disorders, focus on the verbal measure while others such as the ones based on engineering require a better quantitative score. So either-or strategy won’t really prove to be detrimental.
Summing it all up, if the word “required” was supplanted with “encouraged”, the aforementioned issue would have been more pragmatic and I would have embraced it as a wise cause.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...acillating time period at school to the more clearer state of mind during college is what ma...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: AFTERALL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: After all
...ubjects related to sports and exercise. Afterall, physical well-being and fitness also c...
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Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...would have embraced it as a wise cause.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, still, well, while, apart from, as to, i think, in fact, kind of, of course, such as, first of all, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22150537634 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0703095587 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0533917149 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.888888889 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 5.21951772744 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182015202831 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603436992316 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426086609024 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991696574903 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458478002913 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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