Loyalty can be detrimental too.
Personally, I believe loyalty can be detrimental, too.
For example, Nazis during World War II were so deeply loyal to their tyrant leader, Adolf Hitler. Millions of people were killed, myriads of towns perished, and at last, what Germans reached was nothing special. Hitler was a glib rhetorician who was giving vehemently speeches to German people and his soldiers in order to motivate them to take part in war and advocate his plans. What was consisting the axis of Hitler propaganda? Nothing but loyalty to country, loyalty to nationality, and loyalty to the stronger race indeed! Therefore, to be loyal to wrong person or to right one, but in a wrong situation could precipitate havoc in the world which people tell stories of it for many generations.
Another example is what ISIS has done in Syria and parts of Iraq, in recent years. I well remember when ISIS attacked my home town Iran, bombing various places and killing tens of innocent people in a couple of hours before the invaders were killed. It was so horrible. All the town was appalled. Again, there is a question which we ask ourselves. What inspired people to become members of ISIS and then perpetrate those brutal crimes that no human being can ever think of? Were they professional criminals? No. members of ISIS became terrorists only because they felt loyalty to a specific ideology. They could not even think of the pros and cons. They were not able to ponder what is right and what is wrong because those people find it against loyalty. Therefore, loyalty can lead to bigotism and so can destroy countries as ISIS did.
Finally, I became familiar with a girl long time ago who was not fit to me as far as values and visions was concerned. If I married her, it will prompts various adverse effects in my life. Thus to be loyal to all friends could end in bad results.
For those reasons, I believe loyalty can be detrimental, too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 334.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72155688623 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49337930744 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577844311377 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.7513173252 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0952380952 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9047619048 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238177355437 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078534065759 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145936878877 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241153762301 0.150359130593 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.197781983869 0.0667264976115 296% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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