The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
I agree with the given statement that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. Human civilization goes a long way back and the journey thus far has been quite a interesting one. From the ancient rustic life to the current luxuries life, the difference is huge.
If we go through the historical graph, the main mantra of civilization has been the " struggle for existance". Those who wanted to live, had to struggle in one way or another. Though it still stand valid today, the phrase was more relevent in the ancient days where the people had to be physically fit and attentive even just to live. The modern day sophistication like transportation, means of communication, etc. have made the life easier for people but at the same time, over-reliance on those have helped in gradually turning the human race weaker and unhealthy. One can always argue that the choice of healthy or unhealthy life is of the individual and it has nothing to do with the development and conveniences available. However, it is not too hard to understand that the human race in general has become prone or susceptible to the overuse of technology and lots of studies indicate towards the overal degradation of the physical and mental strength.
This can even be proved by a simple comparative example of general lifestyle of the people living in urban areas and rural areas. The people residing in urban area barely have to do the physically intensive works and livlihood that the people in rural area have to go through. In return, the people living the rustic life are both strong and can act indendently to get out of some sudden problem when it comes to that. In recent survey, the happiness index and overall health quality of the people living in rural areas of Nepal was found to be in much better condition compared to that of people living in the capital city, Kathmandu. I am sure it is similar in other part of the world as well. These days, the luxuries and conveniences in the urban areas have limited the physical activities of the people in some gym hours or jogging. In comparison, the people in rural areas and also the people in ancient time had to go through intense physical works to make a living and get on with their life.
However, we must not forget the mental aspect. It may be true that the people are generally weaker nowadays due to the luxuries and all but in term of mental strength and independence, the current generation hold their own stance. The younger people are now more conscious about their rights and can act independently in many cases. Its true that the current generation do not have to prepare themselves for a accidental fight against the Tiger or other wild animals but they sure can make a impressive decision like travelling cross-country on their own, getting married and settling in right age, etc. So, mental awareness and strength seems to be intact or even developed admist the issues of physical degradation.
Thus, i believe that the luxuries life and conveniences has influenced the physical strengh of the people, preventing them from developing into a strong individual. But, the mental independence and capability have not degraded to that extent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...and the journey thus far has been quite a interesting one. From the ancient rusti...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'luxuries'' or 'luxury's'?
Suggestion: luxuries'; luxury's
... the ancient rustic life to the current luxuries life, the difference is huge. If we...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stands'?
Suggestion: stands
... in one way or another. Though it still stand valid today, the phrase was more releve...
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Line 7, column 409, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n do not have to prepare themselves for a accidental fight against the Tiger or o...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...her wild animals but they sure can make a impressive decision like travelling cro...
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Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sues of physical degradation. Thus, i believe that the luxuries life and conv...
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Line 9, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'luxuries'' or 'luxury's'?
Suggestion: luxuries'; luxury's
...gradation. Thus, i believe that the luxuries life and conveniences has influenced th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, in general, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2736.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 560.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88571428571 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76733866112 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489285714286 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 878.4 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.602859103 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.20833333333 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199103101607 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647055970989 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104008108929 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151456982139 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10998217411 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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