Due to the development of modern society, people are living in a better life than before. With the fast-changing social alttitude toward the value of the individual, someone would propose the statement that we are living in an society that everything we want can be satisfied , so there is no need for us to be stong and indipendent, just "let it be" as the lyrics by the Beatles. I disagree with this view totally as we are human-beings and we will make more progress by ourselves, thus a determined and selfperpetuating personality is essential for us.
First of all, Living in a better life with luxuries and conveniences is the pursuit of most of people indeed. While nobody can tell the present technology and living standard is the final promising ones. For example, we were using Nokia smart phones ten years ago and believe it is the most convinient and luxrious phone (some of the model) in the world. Now, however, the iPhone and Android phone have manupilated the phone market for years and we cannot fine the best phone Nokia ever. So nobody will predict what will happen in the future unless we do not want t embrace the future and just surfing the Internent in 3G signal with the ignorance of the future that 5G is coming, which is almost 10000 times fastee than the 3G signal.
On the other hand , there are so field that we haven't discovered, like the Mars. Another proper planet could be the chosen one for Human-living. With the population bombing in our planet, It is the one of the most serious that we need to think about that where will our descendends live in the future as the Earth will reach the threshold of poplation one day. I believe this problem will be more serious than the debate that whether it is a very luxious life we have now so we do not need struggle forward.So we cannot stop our pace for moving toward which the tough determination is significant to the struggle.
Anther point I want to indicate is that animals feed themselves by grazing and then duplicate themselves generations by generations. This is the cycling suitable for almost every living species except for us, the Humans. After millions of years, we are very lucky that we as primates can use tools and fires. By this way, we went on the reovolution of ourselves separate to other living species. If we stopped at using fire and tools , we could still live in caves today. With strong persiveriance and independent individual, the Humans have survived and thrived for millions of years. We should not forget who we were, that's why who we are, and this remeberance of struggle against life will make who we will be.
In conclusion , I do not agree with this essay totally. As we are the Humans, we are evovled the ablity to keep on moving toward better life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 225, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ose the statement that we are living in an society that everything we want can be ...
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Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...that everything we want can be satisfied , so there is no need for us to be stong ...
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Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ries and conveniences is the pursuit of most of people indeed. While nobody can tell the prese...
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Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the most convinient and luxrious phone some of the model in the world. Now, however, the i...
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Line 6, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...than the 3G signal. On the other hand , there are so field that we havent disco...
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Line 6, column 34, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'fields'?
Suggestion: fields
...al. On the other hand , there are so field that we havent discovered, like the Mar...
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Line 6, column 48, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...other hand , there are so field that we havent discovered, like the Mars. Another prop...
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Line 6, column 491, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[3]
Message: Did you mean 'to struggle'?
Suggestion: to struggle
...ious life we have now so we do not need struggle forward.So we cannot stop our pace for ...
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Line 6, column 500, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to forward'
Suggestion: to forward
... we have now so we do not need struggle forward.So we cannot stop our pace for moving t...
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Line 6, column 508, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
... now so we do not need struggle forward.So we cannot stop our pace for moving towa...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s. If we stopped at using fire and tools , we could still live in caves today. Wit...
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Line 8, column 621, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ears. We should not forget who we were, thats why who we are, and this remeberance of...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ll make who we will be. In conclusion , I do not agree with this essay totally....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, still, then, thus, while, except for, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68024439919 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59968211661 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503054989817 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.8867455831 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.428571429 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.380952381 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0726800193013 0.243740707755 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0291273880062 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399540184205 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0512820625409 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179714621835 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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