Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supp

We're facing choices everyday, we choose what we eat, we choose where to live ,we choose which movie to watch. As the statement argued , the students also have the right to select the major they want to. The educational institutions, however, should not advise the students encourage the students to choose the major which may be a promising lucrative field in my opinion.Instead of encouragement, I belive the educational institutions should offer some effective advvice to the students.

To begin with, I believe the students today who enter the university will find the study he interested in.Without the universites' encouragement, the Media has already told them which enterprsie will be the best area for a decent job. And before the students going to the university, there are also the advice from his parents. who know their son/daughter best, or siblings, who may just graduate from colleges.This first hand advice will be most compelling to them ,as this is the experience both from the familiy and society.So there is no need of universities to encourage the students to choose major.

Secondly, It is not the resposibility of universities to bolster the students to choose major, which may cause the imbalance of majors. E.g. Finance field is a better choice for students in that they will make more money after graduation if they are in this area which discuss economy everyday.While the more students major in finance, there must be a shortage in other fields. Like some History or Education major. As far as I concern, they are equally important to our society,because we cannot embrace the future if we do not know our past, and education it is the path to clutivate people. So we could not simply rely on certain major.What's more ,as I put the example of finance students. Too much gradutate from the finance can trigger a battle in the Job market, this will make a bad competetion in the future.

Someone may adress the role of the university when students could not find the major he want to study, says the university should encourage them choose to the lucrative ones.I believe it is not necessary in doing so.If the students do not know how to choose major ,the unnivesity can offer some advice. Even if the students majored in the field he did not intrested in, he may transfer major later.

In conclusion, I do not agree that the educational institution should encourage the students to choose the major which will be lucarative in careers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
Were facing choices everyday, we choose what we eat, we choose where...
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Suggestion: ,
...ose what we eat, we choose where to live ,we choose which movie to watch. As the ...
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... eat, we choose where to live ,we choose which movie to watch. As the statement a...
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... movie to watch. As the statement argued , the students also have the right to sel...
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Suggestion: Instead
...promising lucrative field in my opinion.Instead of encouragement, I belive the educatio...
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...ty will find the study he interested in.Without the universites encouragement, the Medi...
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...d advice will be most compelling to them ,as this is the experience both from the...
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...hem ,as this is the experience both from the familiy and society.So there is no n...
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...ence both from the familiy and society.So there is no need of universities to enc...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...ies to encourage the students to choose major. Secondly, It is not the resposibili...
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Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...ities to bolster the students to choose major, which may cause the imbalance of major...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
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... are in this area which discuss economy everyday.While the more students major in financ...
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Suggestion: While
...his area which discuss economy everyday.While the more students major in finance, the...
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...hey are equally important to our society,because we cannot embrace the future if we do n...
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... could not simply rely on certain major.Whats more ,as I put the example of finance s...
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... simply rely on certain major.Whats more ,as I put the example of finance students...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
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...urage them choose to the lucrative ones.I believe it is not necessary in doing so...
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Suggestion: If
...believe it is not necessary in doing so.If the students do not know how to choose ...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
... the students do not know how to choose major ,the unnivesity can offer some advice. ...
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Suggestion: ,
...students do not know how to choose major ,the unnivesity can offer some advice. Ev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, e.g., first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92344497608 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84683822842 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488038277512 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.0608550548 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.2 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259621808463 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965275458275 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896576367184 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185426338672 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824087950523 0.0667264976115 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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