Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supp

Essay topics:

Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

What should be the primary factors taken into consideration for students in choosing fields of study? Clearly, the statement advocates for the prospective lucrative careers. However, considering the inevitable negative effects the suggestion on students and society, it is not smart for universities to actively encourage students to make their choice merely based on a high salary.

A healthy and strong society needs a balance of experts in all fields. If universities actively encourage students to study in fields that are lucrative such as doctors and lawyers, the number of students in these fields will exceed that of the available jobs. Consequently, the unemployment rate will rise causing subsequent social unrest. At the same time, many other fields, which are not as profitable, will be deprived of talents, such as educators and historians. This will be no doubt pernicious to the overall development of any society.

The intended bright future in the statement for students is not promising. Many factors affect how successful one will be such as aptitude, interests, and understanding of success. Take the lawyer career for instance. If a student is not good at reasoning and logic, he will likely not do well in the field. As a result, though the career in itself is lucrative, he probably will not as successful nor earn as much money as the university has hoped. By contrast, if one grounds their fields of study in their interests, there is little doubt that they will make dedicate more time and work to the study which leads to excellence. As a result, success, money, happiness will come along. So, a lucrative career should not be the primary factor for students to choose their fields of study.

One may argue that educational experts know the fields. They therefore can balance the students’ future, a lucrative career and the needs of the society. However, this is a high hope but not practical. They know professional knowledge, but can by no means control other factors such as government policies, the overall development of the society which inevitably brings about new and different needs of professions. For example, some types of well-paid jobs are now getting popular, which however did not exist ten years ago, such as app developer. Plus, it gets more complex when students’ motivations and aptitude are taken into consideration. Thus, universities cannot precisely predict student’s career life.

In conclusion, students have their own interests and the society needs all kinds of professionals. Universities therefore should not interfere with students’ decision in choosing their fields of study.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r choice merely based on a high salary. A healthy and strong society needs a bal...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ht future in the statement for students is not promising. Many factors affect how successful one...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly predict student's career life. In conclusion, students have their own i...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29716981132 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96937615186 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7174349688 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.84 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.96 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287656711687 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784466921098 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626402836783 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173990421763 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433252617508 0.0667264976115 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

-------------
arguments: OK
-------------

flaws:
No. of Words: 424

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.071 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.748 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.96 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.017 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.45 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.032 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5