There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement suggests we should not save endangered animal and plant species at a great cost in money and jobs. I completely disagree with the claim, because if not starting saving endangered species now, more of them will die out. Chain actions will be enacted and the ecosystem will eventually collapse. Human beings will not survive. So humans need to takes what it needs to maintain the biodiversity.
We only have one earth, if it is gone, we will extinct with it, which makes it inane to save the money and jobs. According to BBC, extinction is a natural process due to the law of nature. By natural selection, some species which do not evolve in response to changes extinct. However, the speed of the extinction has been abnormally sped up. The ecosystem and all the species are interdependent, including human beings. The ecosystem is like a building and all the species are like the brick. When many of the bricks are falling off, the building will eventually collapse. Consequently, all bricks lose the value. If we do not save the endangered animals, chain actions will get worse. More species will die and the ecosystem will eventually crash. And we, human being, as a part of the ecosystem will not able to survive alone. in this case, the money and jobs we saved from leaving the ecosystem to collapse will be meaningless. So, humans need to take what it takes to sustain the ecosystem that we live in.
Moreover, we benefit tremendously from the ecosystem in various ways. The services provided by the ecosystem is vital for humans. Taking our very basic needs for an example. We need to eat, drink, and breathe. The ecosystem provides us food, filters water, and purifies the air. Besides, tourism and recreating resorts, provided and bolstered by the ecosystem, are a big part of the economy which produces taxes and jobs. In addition, the ecosystem also serves us in terms of technology, such as the medical value of species. According to BBC, preserving nature is actually a smart investment. In 1997, the biologist Robert and his colleagues estimated the value of the services that the ecosystem provides us was around 33 trillion dollars a year. For comparison, the entire global economy produced around 18 trillion dollars a year. So, the great costs in money and jobs get very well paid off, and it is therefore economically favorable to save endangered species and conserve the biodiversity.
People may be concerned about the money and jobs cost to save the endangered species. The cost of jobs and money is surely a reasonable concern. However, money is supposed to be used to solve issues, such as stimulating the economy, expanding military, and funding research. Just like every other goals, saving our only ecosystem is not less important. It clearly deserves a good share of the budget. As for employment, there are many other effective ways to target the issues, such as promoting education and welfare system. Sacrificing the only ecosystem that we need to live is not the way.
In conclusion, if we do not do what it takes to save the endangered species, chain actions will happen. And our ecosystem will collapse. As a result, human beings will extinguish as well. Everything else, including saved money and jobs, is meaningless.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
In the second paragraph, you equal 'ecosystem' to 'endangered animal or plant species'.
This topic wants us to compare which is more important. Let us read the topic again:
one side A: a great cost in money and jobs
another side B: endangered animal or plant species
Some questions like:
1. Can A guarantee save B?
2. How much is A in order to save B?
3. If a country doesn't have enough A. still the country need to put A for B?
4. Is there a better way? or keep balance like: a moderate cost
5. ...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 39 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2625 1500
No. of Different Words: 245 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.738 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.205 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.436 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.257 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.363 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 357, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'take'.
Suggestion: take
...ngs will not survive. So humans need to takes what it needs to maintain the biodivers...
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Line 3, column 830, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...osystem will not able to survive alone. in this case, the money and jobs we saved ...
^^
Line 8, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g saved money and jobs, is meaningless.
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'besides', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'as for', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213500784929 0.240241500013 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.17896389325 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0643642072214 0.0880659088768 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0612244897959 0.0497285424764 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.043956043956 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0832025117739 0.12292977631 68% => OK
Participles: 0.0533751962323 0.0406280797675 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69142956251 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0298273155416 0.030933414821 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00627943485086 0.0016655270985 377% => OK
Determiners: 0.0989010989011 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0251177394035 0.0249443105267 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010989010989 0.0148568991511 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3281.0 2732.02544248 120% => OK
No of words: 554.0 452.878318584 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92238267148 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335740072202 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.276173285199 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20036101083 0.200843997647 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13357400722 0.132149295362 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69142956251 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 219.290929204 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454873646209 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.7565865317 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6194690265 194% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 13.85 23.380412469 59% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5705460041 59.4972553346 53% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.025 141.124799967 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.85 23.380412469 59% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.674092028746 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 41.4673285199 51.4728631049 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.2320441989 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373506631164 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102653010542 0.123202303941 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0922511368957 0.077325440228 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.439816533172 0.547984918172 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133903710744 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127205816506 0.161403998019 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757035485844 0.0892212321368 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.507449437798 0.385218514788 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.132008295512 0.0692045440612 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268872349639 0.275328986314 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534942457651 0.0653680567796 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.4325221239 182% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.30420353982 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 27.0 13.5995575221 199% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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