There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The extent to which government should support to save endangered animal or plant species has complicated in its implication. Admittedly, I agree that in underdeveloped countries, improving economy should be emphasized as priority and thus there is little justification for a society to make extraordinary-efforts to save endangered creatures. However, for many relatively developed countries, protecting endangered aninal or plant species is essential as doing so would improve working and living environment and contribute to subsistent development.
As for those less advantaged societies, business or economic conditions are much more paramount than protecting species. if people are suffered from hunger, homeless or unsafety, then putting much money and effort on saving biocycle is meaningless. Sience the government bugets are usually limited, especially in those nations, every expenditure has to considered carefully to benefit most people. it would be more useful if government can spend money on subsidying those who are in danger, providing shelters and necessities to the public instead of costing much money on endangered animal. Demands from human beings should have higher priority than those from other parts. In addition, protecting animal and species should be long-term processes. once we start doing so, the societies should prepare much more sufficient money in the following support because of unstability in nature and uncertainty in environement.
Although the argument is held when we consider the cases in underdeveloped nations, which should put more stress on economic development, we should overestimate the significance of such statement. More importantly, such argument is not supported when big cities are taken into consideration.
To begin with, majority citizens in developed countries or cities no longer need to worry about basic needs. most of them are wealth enough to support their lives. under this circumstance, they would pursue something outside of material goods, such as happiness. to be sure, there is strong relationship between external environment and internal satisfication. when people are able to breathe fresh air and gain opportunity to touch with nature, they are more likely to gain pure delight. The government make efforts to save endangered animal or plant species would lay solid ground for better enviroment. once different kinds of species are conserved, the divesity in nature is increased, which strengthening self-recovery capability and providing better neiborhoods for residents. In addition, not only utilities or standards of living of local people have been enhanced dramatically, people are more prone to improve work efficieny under better working and living environment. As a result, nation will be further strengthened owing to more output from increased effectiveness.
Moreover, as for those relatively advantaged societies, their responsibility is no longer restricted to wealth and prosperity of current people, they should also focus on and prepare for their future generations. Leaders in the society should strive for better environment and greater resources for the youth. if endangered species does not get proper help from human, they are likely to extinct due to factors such as competition for limited food resources or trend of global warming. following this way, more and more even currently abundant animals or plants would disappear permaneantly, because our bio-system is a hyper-interdependent body. Any small change in this system might cause irraprable negative influences on the entire world around us. thus, it is necessary to preserve them. Some might worry the extraodinary costs when implementing such policies. Nonetheless, we have to acknowledge that compared to the potential benefit brought to current and future residents, these money and jobs are relatively small and will eventually be paid off.
In conclusion, I do concede that taking efforts to save endangered animal or plant species is groundless for societies whose primary goal is to satisfy basic living for their citizens. On the contrary, there is never little justification to do so in developed countries. All these extraordinary efforts would be paid off and will benefit the current and next generations in both environment and economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, thus, as for, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3678.0 2235.4752809 165% => OK
No of words: 650.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65846153846 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04926703274 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1507992787 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 335.0 215.323595506 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515384615385 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1163.7 704.065955056 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3647141185 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9375 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217508669755 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527688152562 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613325549715 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122847695937 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727815107612 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 178.0 100.480337079 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.