There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species
The prompt puts forth two sets of views. one suggests that the society should try and save every plant and animal species irrespective of the expense incurred to humans in terms of effort, time and money. The other side recommends that there is no pressing need to make extraordinary efforts to save endangered species. I reject the first set of view outright, while support the latter. however, would prefer to contextualize the second set of view to make it even more acceptable.
To start with, we need to gauge the number of different plants and animal species on Earth before we can attempt to save them. Sadly, the number is inestimable. The reason is--it’s too hard even with our advanced equipments and expansive research methods. there are just too many different species out there; some with such subtle differences which make it nearly impossible to discern them. The failure to enumerate different species precludes the efficacy of our efforts to save them. it is in simple words, an impractical task. Now, it may possible that most known species can be saved, however going all in with time, effort and money is not a provident option. we need to be more calculative. like any other decision we take in our lives or in fact the methodology involved in every decision-making process, we need to do a cost-benefit analysis. one expected counterargument would be—how can we quantify benefit in this case? benefit is in fact misleading for this case and we should rather use cost-effect analysis. Here, the effect would be the projected increase in numbers of the species in the coming years. The ability to sustain the surge and ensure no run away reactions like excessive proliferation of one of the species at the expense of others. The situation calls for pragmatism over sentiment. Also, it may not be possible to save a dying species after all. For example, a species may have stopped adapting to the changes in weather and climate, which by the way, involves human as complicits to a large extent. For such species, spending any amount of money won’t be fruitful because the probability of their eventual survival is so very low. Again, a cerebral approach is needed to make the right decision in such a case.
we thus need to more open minded when it comes to saving animal and plant species on the fringe. some of the factors that we should take into consideration apart from time and money is the relative importance of a given species. For example, a rare insect species with 12 legs might be the only one of its kind, whereas an endangered spider species has similar other species. it is clear as to which species should be given more focus. The above example aptly illustrates that we need to decide on a case-by-case basis. Further, the funds saved through logical decision making might have a better use; like investing in R&D of more cost effective and efficacious methods to save dying species.
To sum it up, I agree that no extraordinary efforts need to be taken in terms of time, money and efforts to save endangered species. however, I’d like to add that we need to take a final call on case-by-case basis, because some species might just be too precious to lose.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, whereas, while, after all, apart from, as to, for example, in fact, by the way, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2667.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82278481013 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68816956385 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499095840868 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 859.5 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5994366461 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0322580645 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8387096774 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58064516129 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264246866548 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674095088953 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065154809099 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183607933298 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332567529858 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.