The author has stated luxuries and conveniences of modern era as boon to development of the individuals. Since evolution if the mankind, we humans have striven to improve ourselves and this complex world- we line in today- is a testimony to that progress. Yes, it is true that some modern life luxuries and self-aid has thwarted the physical growth of humans but at the same time it also true that the urge for same luxury and convenience has devoted to the cognitive development. In my opinion mental growth has far more reaching impacts than physical.
For first, one’s opinion on the argument depends on his or her perception of the strong and independent individuals. One person might take it as physical strength and biologically fit to be self-dependent, while other may think of it as more socially than biologically. In any case there are evidences that people are way more developed and independent now than ever before. Consider for example, a person may encounter conveniences in his day to day life- using clock alarm to wake up, taking a metro to commute to office, more likely using computer at work and a cell phone to make calls. To me all those dependencies are, more or less, the necessity of life in today’s world rather than luxury. In fact, with the aid of modernization people can manage to spare time for themselves. They can utilize the saved time in their social life, salubrious activities and to ponder on secrets of life.
On the contrary, there are indeed some activities that can be categorized as the luxury. Consumption of alcohol and smoking, for instance, has become one of the most eminent social elements of the life. It is believed that 60% of the youth is indulged in the alcohol consumption, in some or other way. In addition to that, due to the economic growth of a country people find themselves more deeply entrenched in luxury and there by neglecting the need of fitness. For example, people have switched to dine at the luxurious restaurants rather than cook at home. This consumption of junk food is having serious consequences on the health of people.
In conclusion, there are pros and cons to every situation but in my opinion the modern-day luxuries and conveniences can also be utilized for leading a purposeful and healthy life. Undeniably, elements of modern-day life, if exercised seemly, can transform people lives by making them more self-reliant and stronger than precedent events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: trues
... of humans but at the same time it also true that the urge for same luxury and conve...
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Suggestion:
...ant and stronger than precedent events.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in any case, in my opinion, it is true, more or less, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95399515738 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8643095573 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52784503632 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8129992945 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.684210526 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7368421053 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120116467903 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401685346013 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367169998829 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076293890558 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175787319849 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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