Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people Thus most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be excluded GRE Issue 10

The speaker cites about the individual`s response towards the cultures that encourage them to behave differently than they are . I strongly agree with the speaker as we can see many people in our society sacrificing their field of interest in order to be accepted in the society. They are coerced to live a unsatisfied and disgruntle life.

As we can see,different people residing in different parts of world have motley of cultures and it is so hard to stick around these every cultures. Some cultures believes something and the other believes another thing. It is people whose becomes sandwich between these cultures whether to follow or not. In most of the under modernized village or cities, people are so naive that they blindly think that they have to follow those cultures. And they don`t see the feasibility of these cultures and what impact are these cultures creating in individual`s life. This can create individual`s life miserable. For eg; in some village area, some people might be interested in dancing, singing, acting and because of their culture like they should not be involved in such profession, they have to let go of such passion in order to be fit in that society. This can anything but help grow an individuals into what they want.

And most of the cultures in our society are so unwarranted that they bound people in their circumscribe and impede every individual`s personal life. Let us talk about the people with different caste, race, religion etc living in our society. They have their own way of celebrating their own feast and festivals and their own traditions of doing their own things. In our society, we can see that some people are criticizing other`s way of celebrating the feast and way of living their individual`s life. This can create a serious problems in them. They must have right to move their way of life in their own way without being encountered by the people`s opinion.

However, every cultures cannot be bad. Some cultures carry a very good moral values and following that cultures and being the part of that culture can bring a decent results in our life`s too. It`s just that we must have ability to filter the bad and good sides of that cultures. And if necessary, if that cultures is bad then you must be able to personify yourself about the impact of that culture and correct if possible. This can also build up your personalities not just degrade it.

So, in sum we can say that it depends on individuals too whether he can filter the different sides of cultures like which one is better for him/her and to withstand every circumstances that comes on their way if they are right and deal with it without falling apart. Mostly, we can see people sacrificing their own personalities in order to adjust in the society they are living in and this should not be followed as they are hampering their own lifes.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, another thing

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 12.9106741573 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2426.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88128772636 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81460212628 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43661971831 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6626774873 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.083333333 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95833333333 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3296867614 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100826403246 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630216325326 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202851197301 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043829356007 0.0667264976115 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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