Most people choose a career on the basis of such pragmatic considerations as the needs of the economy, the relative ease of finding a job, and the salary they can expect to make. Hardly anyone is free to choose a career based on his or her natural talents or interest in a particular kind of work.
People in today's scenario are just considering success as their primary goal rather than the work of their interest. Therefore, they try every short cut in order to achieve success in their lives. And they achieve it by choosing a career in which they have more surety of finding a job. Hence, I concur with the author's idea that people choose their career based on the possibility of finding a job rather than the career that is best suited for a talent that a person possess or the interest has a person is having.
On the first facet, the education system that is being followed by schools and institutions are so rigid that a child does not enough opportunity to showcase his/her talent. The subjects that are being taught in the schools are based on the practicality that is the current requirement of the economy. Other important subjects like music, sports, arts or literature are often optional subjects and even the teachers of these subjects are inept. Moreover, the teachers in the schools urge children to focus on subjects based on practicality. There is a shortage of equipments available at school and even if a student has an inclination towards a particular area he/she can not practice.
Secondly, there is so much pressure from parents as they want their child to follow a path where he can achieve success in comparatively lesser time than he will achieve by choosing a career of his/her interest. For example, I was good at playing cricket and even I got selected in my state team. But, I was equally good at study and was performing well. However, my parents urge me to abdicate cricket and continue to study because they thought there is a high chance for me to get success in studies rather than pursue cricket. Moreover, peer pressure also makes you change your decision. As my performance in studies decreased my friends got ahead of me and it made me focus on studies more.
In the crux, the author's claim that people choose a career on the basis of ease of finding a job is true and even if people try to focus on their career that are driven by their talents there are other factors that do not let them to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SHORT_CUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortcut'?
Suggestion: shortcut
...eir interest. Therefore, they try every short cut in order to achieve success in their li...
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Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...finding a job. Hence, I concur with the authors idea that people choose their career ba...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6335078534 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50314897209 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489528795812 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6132714123 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.625 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233678818536 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713449747526 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881708944362 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151096844462 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823092069201 0.0667264976115 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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