Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting.
The conclusion might appear logical and convincing at first glance. However, a critical analysis of the justification supplied by the author that after posing restrictions on landscaping and house painting would result in an increase of the value of their property does raise many questions that are not answered by the author in his/her argument. The premises in their current form are not cogent and arguments build too many unwarranted assumptions. Therefore, ideas cited in the premise lead to assumptions that are feeble and susceptible to attacks.
First of all, the author not considered other major factors that might have affected the boom in the price of the property in Brookville community. There can be factors like development around the community. Maybe it is in the central part of the city and closely situated to shopping areas, airports, hospitals, stadiums, parks or any such area which can make it more useful than other communities. May be transportation to other parts of the city is easily available there which can allow easy and cheap movement from one area to another. The author has made a direct connection between an increase in the value of property to the restrictions on landscaping and house painting which is not viable at all.
Moreover, the author has not mentioned any facts about the living environment of Brookville community. Which can be a major factor in deciding the circle rates of that area. The type of people living there, the living standards they maintaining, the economic conditions and many more. For example: if in a community richer people are living and are maintaining high living standards, surely the property value of that area will be ambiguously higher. Hence, it will be wrong to conclude this argument in the absence of these observations.
Additionally, the author has considered the time span of seven years. It will be naive of us to just consider restrictions on landscaping and house painting solely have impacted the increase in property value. In seven years things can change drastically. May be, seven years earlier people used to value house paints more but now they focus more on the surroundings they are living. And people might be more liberal in today's scenario and might not like a unified community.
The author should have done a survey to justify the relationship between the applied restrictions and average property values in Brookville. He should have analyzed whether the factors affecting home prices in the two areas are the same or not. The author should have discussed the location of Deerhaven Acres, a policy of the government to develop the area etc. The author should have provided some additional evidence to support his argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2236 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.044 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng environment of Brookville community. Which can be a major factor in deciding the c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11160714286 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77963723018 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502232142857 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3549217798 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5652173913 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221071695258 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629960593881 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480221430688 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120203462986 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528320349209 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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