Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting.
The given argument brings out the fact that the average property values have tripled in Brookville over the last seven years. There may be numerous reasons for this steady escalation in property values. The rise in the average property values may not necessarily be an outcome of the efforts put in for landscaping community's yards and deliberating upon the colors of the exteriors of homes. The importance of paying attention to details like landscaping of lawns and house painting may add to the scenic beauty of the community as seen by an outsider, but that alone does not suffice as a reason for the rise in property values.
The argument is weakened by the existence of several factors that may have directly or indirectly affected the average property values of the Brookville community in the last seven years. The location of the community is a compelling reason for a substantial increase in the property rates. Proximity to shopping centers, airport, railway stations and bus stands is a deciding factor for such an increase. Rise in property rates of a particular area may also be attributed to infrastructural development over a period of time. Such development may include establishment of civic amenities like hospitals, schools and roads. Infrastructural developments attract leading companies to open factories and outlets in the vicinity of the community leading to an increase in job opportunities. All these factors in addition to the security situation prevalent in the area may be responsible for escalation of property prices.
The situation with respect to the homeowners in Brookville community may have been different seven years ago and adopting the same set of restrictions in the present time does not imply a similar effect on the property values in Deerhaven Acres. The argument could have been substantiated with additional evidence in support of the claim that the rise in property values was a direct implication of the set of restrictions adopted by the home owners in the Brookville community. However, one cannot ignore the other factors, highlighted in the previous paragraph, which may directly or indirectly play a significant role in the appreciation of property values of the Brookville community. The given argument could have been further strengthened if the writer had mentioned landscaping of lawns and house painting as one of the probable reasons for the growth in property values instead of citing it as the only reason or if he had made a fleeting reference to the other factors affecting escalation of property values. In its present form, the argument is unconvincing due to lack of substantial logic in support of its claim.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 435 350
No. of Characters: 2218 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.567 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.099 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.98 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.902 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n for the rise in property values. The argument is weakened by the existence o...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ille community in the last seven years. The location of the community is a compelli...
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Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...d to infrastructural development over a period of time. Such development may include establish...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, in addition, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19310344828 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01337486248 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455172413793 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6844701538 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.1875 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1875 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285841693671 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100652325195 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825320772406 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203520960655 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043211655873 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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