A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

A nation education is a subject that is highly debatible and of big importance as it shapes the future of a nation. The prompt suggests applying a national policy where students before college must follow an unique curriculum. In my opinion, I greatly disagree with the prompt for the following reasons.
To begin, the process of creating a curriulum is a task that from a nation perspective should be oriented towards a succesful job life incorporation. Taking this in mind, for a nation to florish it must have a balanced amount of workers that can take action from areas that vary from arts to engineering. For instance, if a nation curriculum focuses mostly on math and sciences, in the future there will exist a lack of people that works as artists. The above example illustrates the possible consequences of not giving a variety of curriculums for people to develop according to their inner abilities. This kind af action could result in a lack of certain professionals or even a disadvantage when compared to other countries.
Secondly, not all students have the same abilities and thus, some may require special curriculums that correspond to their needs. For instance, students who are above the average and may finish a proposed national curriculum in half the time. This kind of student has two options that depend on his/her parents, first go straitgth to collegue with people that are not his age or second have a specialized education before college that shapes this student in a specialized manner. The second option results limited by the prompt and may imply for this student a feeling of discomfort.
In the other hand, some people may argue that curriculum must be tha same for all student,s not allowing for unfairness or inequality. However, this kind of statement limits the appearence of specialized schools that allow the development of certain abilities a student feels affinity towards. To conclude, freedom of curriculum development should be implemented at all studying stages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07552870091 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86352564481 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540785498489 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1770952707 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.0 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205032079673 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077029348332 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451282727444 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135288651173 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284650548201 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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