A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Whether a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college could be weighed in many aspects. However, the argument is based on generalization. The statement simply assumes that all students have the will or right condition to study in college, but in reality, some of them cannot even afford the tuition fees charged by colleges.

Admittedly, the speaker's claim might appear to have considerable merit. When requiring all of the students to study the same curriculum before attending college, it can be assured that students will at least require basic knowledge, thus making college education more balanced and fair. However, when speaking of "students", the following comes to mind: students having the condition to receive further education in college, students who need to enter the workforce immediately after high school due to poor family financial situation. Therefore, in order to determine whether a national curriculum is necessary, we have to first examine the different sorts of students.

It is needed to take both types of students into account, and we will find the statement problematic. Consider the underprivileged students, who cannot afford the high expenses charged by colleges, it is rather important for them to require some professional knowledge as well as enough experiences to have better performances at work. If they are forced to study the same curriculum with other students, then they can only choose those relatively basic jobs. So, in order to help those underprivileged students, some alternatives of this argument should be proposed.

Moreover, the argument also fails to consider that every student has different interests they want to pursue. If all of the students are forced to study the same curriculum, then they might get bored and lose enthusiasm while studying. Studying requires motivation, if students can choose what they would like to learn, then they will be more satisfied and has less resistance while learning,

In conclusion, the claim is not as persuasive as it stands. Although studying the same national curriculum can assure equality when students attend college, not all of the students can benifit from it since they have no chance in attending college. Also, it is better for students to choose some subjects appealing to them to remain passion in studying.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... and has less resistance while learning, In conclusion, the claim is not as persu...
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...ality when students attend college, not all of the students can benifit from it since they...
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...college. Also, it is better for students to choose some subjects appealing to the...
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... to them to remain passion in studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, in conclusion, speaking of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33773087071 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91896911105 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514511873351 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2918826126 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.4375 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255315811371 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901798539145 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951627469248 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164644512454 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602731224618 0.0667264976115 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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