A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
There are many arguments on whether a curriculum has to be uniform, or it might be different. The proponents of providing the same curriculum insist that it will help a nation to easily maintain the education system. However, providing exactly the same curriculum to every student is ignoring the fact that the learning abilities of each student vary.
Firstly, the same curriculum might be detrimental to students with different learning paces. For instance, in math class, how fast a student can understand a new concept and apply it to real-life is various. Some can catch the point right after the class while others require more time to achieve that level. If a lecturer proceeds to the next class with more advanced topics in accordance with the pace of fast learners, there will be students who cannot understand the entire class. If it continues, the ones who cannot keep with the class might forgo the math class. In contrast, if a lecturer conducts a lecture slowly to help everyone understand the concept, the students who relatively learn faster will feel boring as the same contents are repeated. In this case, they might lose their interest to study more missing chances to more deeply handle the subject. Hence, providing the same curriculum to all of the students is not a great idea.
Secondly, in order to increase the effectiveness of education, it has to be provided depending on the student’s demands. 12 years, the time students spend in school before going to universities, are a fairly long time, so, many high schools handle advanced topics in each subject. However, teaching the averaged advanced contents, as suggested in the prompt, cannot be considered the best way. For example, there is a student who wants to go to law school to be a lawyer. Then, she might want to handle more advanced politics and social science rather than less related subjects such as science. If she takes more advanced courses in those fields, she will be advantageous to study further subjects at university. Therefore, the curriculum depending on students’ demand, rather than a uniform curriculum, will be more beneficial.
Despite the benefit of providing the same curriculum in maintaining the entire national education system, this assertation does not thoroughly consider the different abilities and demands of students. Thus, the prompt cannot be agreed upon.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'catches'.
Suggestion: catches
...ly it to real-life is various. Some can catch the point right after the class while o...
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Line 2, column 908, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...Hence, providing the same curriculum to all of the students is not a great idea. Secondl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11794871795 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73057661533 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9945719807 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115202779089 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425138928181 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360856594304 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0803758925877 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022911260734 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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