In order for any work of art — for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song — to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Art makes our lives colorful and enjoyable conveying authentic scenes, sounds, or sometimes smells. As diverse art forms have come out, several forms that cannot be easily understandable by laypeople also have developed. While those new forms can be helpful to broaden the range of art, it seems hard to get enough merits for the following reasons.
Firstly, non-understandable art fields will be funded less compared to other types of arts. In general, people fund money to the fields where they seem familiar or have a higher probability of success. For example, there are numerous funding for films, songs, and paintings that are famous to the public. In contrast, relatively less popular painting styles or poems are hard to receive funding from the government or companies due to their uncertainty. Financial problem is important in arts as is in other areas. Through funding, they can plan projects and expositions, gather people to work together, buy materials required to complete arts and develop to the further upper steps. Thus, as it is hard to receive funding in non-understandable arts, they will have fewer opportunities to develop their arts further and be less likely to have merit.
Secondly, art has to be shared in public in order to have full meaning. The main purpose of art is conveying creators’ opinions through various forms. It can be philosophical, political, or elsewhere without limitation. In this context, if art is not shared among people, the intend of creators in creating arts cannot be shown, and it becomes useless. While understandable arts can be actively shared with delivering what the makers wanted to say, non-understandable arts cannot. This is because the public will not be able to do that unless the artists delineate the meaning of the arts. Hence, without understandability, arts cannot convey the meaning of what they imply, as result, they do not have merit.
Whether unfamiliar art forms have merit has been a contradicting discussion in the art industry. Some might say as those arts can broaden the range of art to somewhere we have never thought of, so they have enough merit. However, those have only a little possibility to be developed due to the lack of funding and to be shared among the public. Therefore, arts can have merit when it is generally understandable to most people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ext, if art is not shared among people, the intend of creators in creating arts cannot be ...
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Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ply, as result, they do not have merit. Whether unfamiliar art forms have merit has bee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, in contrast, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07493540052 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94929292537 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519379844961 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9720328042 60.3974514979 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.5238095238 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216230323731 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075865633885 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404689617273 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145984547479 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176357027979 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.