Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
In most cases, major cities, wherever they are placed, in Europe, America, Asia, or else, take important roles in various aspects such as economy, education, and entertainment. Based on it, it seems reasonable that governments faithfully support the cities aiming to their prosperity. However, the reason looks dubious as not every major city is related to a nation’s traditional culture, which is descendent from their ancestors.
Firstly, there are several cases where their major cities have a tenuous relation to their tradition. For example, the capital of Australia, Canberra, is definitely an important city, but it is not like one of the representing cities of its tradition. It was determined as a capital with its locational benefit, almost in the middle of two big cities in Australia, Sydney and Melbourne. It is truly beneficial to financially support this city in the economy or else as it will contribute to other cities’ wealth. However, it is absurd to insist financial aid to Canberra is important to preserve and generate its cultural tradition.
On the other hand, there are also cities in which the presented reason can be applied. Some countries such as Korea has major cities related to their history and traditional culture. In Seoul, the capital of Korea, there are thousands of historical places and artifacts as it has been a capital for more than 500 years since the Joseon Dynasty. In fact, Korea is financially aiding the city to maintain the preserved palaces such as Gyeonbok palace, placed in the middle of Seoul, and support those who are studying traditional cooking, music, and skills. As a result, many citizens have had high interests in tradition - it has resulted in a positive influence on the country’s prosperity. In this case, it makes sense for financial support for the purpose of preserving and generating traditional culture.
To sum up, it is sincerely important to financially aid the major cities with their roles in supporting and developing countries in various fields. However, in order to insist on the rationale for the claim, it cannot be simply limited to its preservation and generation of traditional culture, but it has to be somewhat more generally applicable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, as to, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, in most cases, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16850828729 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89182989555 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513812154696 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4870899758 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.9375 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336096537499 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117170779973 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638755579717 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214119146934 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213926035148 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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