People's attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People form their attitudes based on not only their own proclivity but also other external factors such as their current situations, surroundings, or a whole society. There are contradicting views on which one of them is the most powerful in determining people’s attitudes. While all of them are responsible at least partially for human being’s behaviors, the impact from a whole society is the most influential one.
Firstly, laws in society form people’s attitudes strongly: our lives are confined to full of rules. For example, when we cross a walk, we unconsciously follow traffic rules: stop at the led light and start crossing in the green light. Laws are also applied in grocery stores: no one just brings the groceries without purchasing them. If they were more influenced by their current situation or surroundings rather than laws, they might have crossed the walk in the red light not to be late to a meeting or not paid for the groceries considering their financial states, however, not many people are doing them. Thus, it shows people’s attitudes are clearly determined by society as a whole more than their current situations or surroundings.
Secondly, cultural norms cannot be ignored in our lives. Apart from laws, there are cultural norms that might have not been written in letters, but everyone in society implicitly follows them. For example, in Korea, when we make a conversation with older people, we use different forms of words from when we talk with our friends. Also, there are manners such as holding a door for others with heavy boxes in their hands or being quiet during a presentation. Likewise, someone’s situations might be contradicting to follow cultural norms, but these norms usually have a higher priority to individuals’ situations or surroundings. Therefore, it shows cultural norms determine people’s attitudes more strongly compared to individuals’ situations or surroundings.
Still, there are many thoughts on the factors in determining people’s attitudes. Some people insist that behavior patterns in a friend group in young children show surroundings might have a stronger influence in determining behaviors. However, those cases are relatively trivial compared to how laws and cultural norms have formed general behaviors. Therefore, society as a whole has the most important role in determining people’s attitudes.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, at least, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37866666667 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.970628366 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0084011362 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.055555556 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236787230067 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821007622031 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682510022369 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150452332007 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375893002122 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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