Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The development of scientific technologies over the last 50 years has changed our lives to more convenient and effective. Hoping for a further positive evolution of our daily lives, there are some people who insist that restrictions on scientific research and development have to be minimized. However, my opinion is a lot different from theirs. I believe that a certain level of government restrictions is required for the following reasons.
Firstly, science is too close to the borderline of human beings’ safety. Especially for those research and development in medicine, they can directly affect our health; thus, many restrictions have been on them. For example, when developing vaccines, they should meet strict requirements, including long-term test results for various groups (i.e., male and female adults, children, and the elderly). The main reason for its strictness has originated in the awareness of its possible dangers. Thus, with consideration of the possibility that new scientific development causes dangerous effects on us, I would like to say restrictions should exist.
Secondly, some scientific research and development include national secretes. Many of the studies conducted by national research institutes are directly related to the power of nations. For example, space-rocket-related technologies can be easily converted to developing missiles. Therefore, those technologies are kept confidential to outside or other countries with strict regulations by governments. If there is no restriction to share the technologies with others, it will result in the loss nation’s power. It demonstrates the importance of setting restrictions on scientific research and development. For this reason, I support the necessity of restrictions on scientific studies.
It is true that restrictions on scientific studies may hinder scientific technologies from further evolution. However, as they are strongly related to our safety and sometimes include secrets of our nations, I insist that restrictions on them are required at a certain level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this research' or 'those researches'?
Suggestion: this research; those researches
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74183006536 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31675519927 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565359477124 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7914483889 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.6111111111 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222110349826 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743978037345 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466230519712 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138224409684 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458088461987 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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