A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
Education holds a great significance in shaping the future citizens of a nation which in turn shapes the future of the nation. The author recommends that we introduce a uniform curriculum across the nation until its students enter college. I disagree with the recommendation for the following reasons.
Whether a nation wide uniform curriculum would work well depends largely on the social, cultural, and economic differences between different states or provinces within the country. In a diverse country such as India, where each state is a world on its own in terms of language, culture and social structures - a country wide uniform curriculum would fail pathetically to account for the richness of such diversity. It is essential for students to be well aware of their local history, traditions, and the rich heritage of the place. A curriculum that is customised for each state or province would impart such knowledge to the students.
One can not gainsay the fact that education has the potential to affect the political leanings of students. We can find myriad examples where the curriculum keeps changing based on the current governing party. A leftist ruling party might decide to teach more of the left ideologies in schools while a right wing party might do just the opposite. To have a uniform curriculum that is solely decided by the central government presents a huge advantage (to the extent of being unfair) and power to a single body which has greater risks of the power being misused whereas, a curriculum that varies according to each state has the potential to introduce students to different ideologies which in turn forms a good balanced mix of citizens with wider perspectives. The goal, however, is to have education as disjoint as possible from the ideologies of the current ruling party. Education should be about presenting unbiased and neutral views on matters and impart knowledge. But, one can never be sure that such unfair advantages and misuse of power will not happen. So, it would be a wise decision to not have such power reside with a single body.
Deciding on the curriculum is about choosing the relevant and appropriate knowledge that would serve the best in shaping good, responsible and well-informed future citizens. Since the nature of this relevant and appropriate knowledge varies based on the location, it would be better to have curriculum that accomodates such localised knowledge along with the knowledge that is relevant to the entirety of the nation and has a diverse curriculum that is not prejudiced or one-sided. A state
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
...for the following reasons. Whether a nation wide uniform curriculum would work well depe...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, whereas, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08962264151 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78397192047 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478773584906 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.3182773478 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.941176471 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164478110133 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051603730023 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767904609906 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1224796455 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865343826544 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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