A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Everyone is a unique creature. Some people suggest all of the students should study the same courses until they enter college. I totally disagree with that recommendation out of two reasons.
First of all, forcing students to learn all of things discourages them to pursue their further studies. If someone is more interested in arts or singing, they have to waste a lot of time studying math and physics, which is a torture for them. Thus, they only have little time to do what they want and really like, which may diminish their passion about the future. Literally, not all of the juveniles need to learn the same things since they have their own interests. And if they can engage in whay they are excited about, they can perform better, which will benefit the society as they grow up.
Furthermore, the recommendation leaves no time for the youth from a passive role to an active role in their own life, which may lead to chaos. Before entering the university, they are required to learn the set of curriculum regardless of their own thoughts. And it suddenly transform to a new circumstances where let them make their own decisions in the college. How can they choose their best way for themselves without any experience ? In China, a large number of freshmen drop the school because they have no idea about what to do next for themselves in the future and they have spent the whole of their life only to pursue the entrance of the university. Therefore, the government should give children their discretions to choose courses when they are still in high schools. In that way, these young people can develop their own personalities and may achieve better goals.
In conclusion, although it is easy for administration to let the students learn the same things until they go to the college, it actually obscure the distincts between people and does no good for their future career as well as the future of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... a unique creature. Some people suggest all of the students should study the same courses ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...assion about the future. Literally, not all of the juveniles need to learn the same things...
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...earn the set of curriculum regardless of their own thoughts. And it suddenly tran...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'transforms'?
Suggestion: transforms
...of their own thoughts. And it suddenly transform to a new circumstances where let them m...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'circumstance'?
Suggestion: circumstance
...hts. And it suddenly transform to a new circumstances where let them make their own decisions...
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Line 5, column 450, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...lves without any experience ? In China, a large number of freshmen drop the school because they h...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'obscures'?
Suggestion: obscures
...til they go to the college, it actually obscure the distincts between people and does n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 334.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7754491018 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56540376989 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538922155689 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4660232317 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6875 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156779955266 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598186199281 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514252829878 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11302596486 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278235347951 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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