“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they
enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the
recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples
shape your position.
What is the meaning of word nation? It means all are united, all are together, and all are judged in a similiar way, nobody is considered more or less than any other. So, definitely in a nation, students should study the same national curriculum untill they enter college, because after entering college the streams are different, according to the field one has selected, he/she has to follow it's particular curricula. I would like to present my views bolstering the statement.
Firstly, if a student is studying in some school where they teach more english, than a student studying in some other school where english is taught nominally, now at the time of taking admission in to college, the student who had more influence to english would be beneficial than the other student, this would result in partiality. So, it is very much necessary that a particular structure be followed throughout a nation, so that no student feel that, they are being targeted or ignored when it comes to selection. Perhaps, a school has started the admission process for new academic term, how will the school decide from two students which one to take, where both of them have scored well in the past schools, but the problem is that different curriculums were followed, how will the school now decide which student will be able to cope with their school's particular curricula.
Secondly, if there is no particular format, in the nation which consists of diverse categories of students, how will they have a common base on which the students would feel that all are equal, and everybody will be taught the same thing, nobody will be given extra knowledge which would help him/her better. For example, in a nation there are numerous religions being followed, somebody follows Hindu religion, some follow Muslim religion. Now, if there would be no particular structure for students to study, than each religion woul follow it's own structure and this would lead to resentment being instigated, that a particular religion is gaining more knowledge than other, which would lead to widespread clashes between people of different religions, and the word "nation" would loose it's dignity.
Finally, I would like to conclude that it is very much important that a nation follows a particular curricula in order to maintain peace, and each student getting educated equally, so that nobody stands to argue that anyone is being treated unfairly or unequally. Also, generalising the format would result in coherence between the people of the nation which would result in betterment of the nation, as it would produce students who would be predilected to be a helping hand in growth of the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 794, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
..., and the word 'nation' would loose its dignity. Finally, I would like t...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'curriculum'?
Suggestion: curriculum
...tant that a nation follows a particular curricula in order to maintain peace, and each st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04269662921 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64744089929 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487640449438 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.677652692 60.3974514979 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.0 118.986275619 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.0833333333 23.4991977007 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217176949831 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929023934735 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672707821657 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156208687754 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530378211433 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 14.1392134831 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.