“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The given statement argues that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter the college. As a consequence of this idea, all students in a nation, irrespective of their cultural backgrounds, would be required to undergo the same curriculum throughout their schooling. Before jumping into any defined opinion or conclusions, it would be more comprehensive to analyse the implications and benefits of such an unified curriculum.
In any given national schooling curriculum, a student would begin his/her school life by enrolling in kindergarten. Progression would then take place through many sequential levels or classes. Often, in their schooling, the performance of students is dictated and primarily influenced by their environment. Due to Environmental factors like malnutrition, poor parental care, lack of proper tutoring etc, students tend to perform poorly when compared to their counterparts who hail from a Better Environment. This is particularly seen in many countries across the world. For example, in universities, Students from private schools often tend to perform comparatively better than their peers from public schools. This can be attributed to varying syllabi and curriculum as Private schools tend to cater to those students who are financially privileged. However, all these disparities can be resolved to some extent by having the same national curriculum.
Except for a few nations, most nations are made of different ethnicities and minorities who may have some special requirements. For example, if the national curriculum appears to be biased towards the needs of the majority, subtle or pronounced conflicts may arise between authorities and activists. Moreover, Any flaws in the national curriculum may go unnoticed as all other curriculum are eliminated. Having different curriculum instead of one may be helpful in the long run as flaw in one may be compensated in another. for example, if the national curriculum emphasizes more on Theoretical knowledge than practical and if another curriculum emphasizes the opposite, the society may benefit as a whole as any flaw in one of the curriculum is compensated by the other.
It can be concluded that a national curriculum isn't ideal in the long run. though it may appear to resolve inequalities, it stil doesn't bridge the gap between different sections of the society. Moreover, a monotonous approach would fail to resolve any flaws by itself.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, except for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43523316062 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12830351041 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536269430052 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8313178437 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.421052632 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203956994187 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738158439573 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951501977356 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133569255403 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853173742405 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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