a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
The idea behind the creation of governments is arguably one of humanities greatest achievements. it is the defying mark between us and other living creatures. The government of any country has a responsibility to its citizens to provide them with the best education possible for the good of the individuals and the population. many nations require all students to follow the same curriculum, one might argue that it has many benefits to it. one may be the easy analysis of the whole system, and many other. While I believe that is true I think it will be at the cost of many other things. I believe that requiring all students to study the same curriculum throughout primary and secondary schools is bad to the overall performance of the educational system, for two main reasons.
human knowledge has advanced exponentially over the last centuries. information that might have made a scholar in the 16’th century be the talk of the people is now taught for 6th graders. this indicate that it’s hard to include every possible piece of information into the curriculum. it may be a waste of time for many students to study about the law of thermal induction, since this student might not have any interest in pursuing a career in science. So, if it is a part of the curriculum then the system is requiring students to study something they have no interest in. where on the other hand, a lot of students may have the interest in pursuing a career in a STEM field, where studying the law of thermal induction is of good use. if either of these scenarios are true, then requiring students to study the same subject or removing it (for example) is harmful to either one.
Furthermore, scientific studies have shown that happiness and real interest in the subjects taken is a deciding factor in the overall performance of students, and may have devastating affects on the mental health of students. if governments decide to require the same curriculum with any flexibility, we are at the risk of raising an entire generation with many problems. if we imagine a student who has no interest in learning about Fourier’s law or Einestien’s rule of integration and differentiation. this student may lose interest in the educational system as a whole and may decide to abandon the educational route all together.
education is a critical factor in the development of nations. Therefore, it requires massive care. Ministers and politicians should have the interest of the students put into account when making decisions about the future of them. Several aspects should be considered before making any decision affecting the whole educational system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02247191011 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95323137574 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485393258427 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0125746377 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.590909091 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2272727273 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243645181357 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675323254423 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844147450448 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13896531904 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519397094705 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.