A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
A nation should requires all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
The author say a country should command all of its students to study the same courses until they enter college. I disagree with this view because the same national curriculum does not always guarantee benefits to students and the possibility of gains from different curriculum remains unfounded. The rest of the essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the level of freedom on the required subjects until they become freshman in university.
Admittedly, the exactly equal curriculum has some pros strong point. first, during almost schools have quiz,midterm or final exam in every semester, the normalized rules on every course gives the fairness to judge students. When they enter the college, the preferences between students are various in narrow range, so ranking and grading system is inevitable to refer priority of choices. For example, many people want to get into the medical college, law school which guarantees higher payment in the future. In addition, speaking of the level of possibility, the regularized curriculum is effective because teacher need to prepare few subject for students. Since the number of teachers are limited than that of students, considering every preferences of students are ideal, but not practical. The evidences for the side of author seems enough to support his stance, however, adding comments of opposite site strengthen his position. The following will discuss the disadvantages of the same national curriculum during middle and high school.
first, the main assumption what the author dismissed on the topic is the different ability ranges depending on every person. For example, the government of south Korea requires every high school student to take an korean SAT exam to rank their scores and the exam consist of just 4 or 5 courses such as Korea, English, Math, Science. however, in our communities, we have copious range of different jobs and tasks what student might face in their future, and it can hardly be determined by only 5 examination.
Second, the same national curriculum limit the potential growth of creativity of every student, and it eventually block the developement of our society. The students who have only educated from the regularized curriculum are not familiar to the tasks which requires creativity, but they used to given, repeated tasks. however, throughout the whole history of human society, the invention or revolution comes from the specific creativity. therefore, putting a cap on the distinction on every student will obstruct the further growth of our entire society.
Moreover, the goal of our life is not to follow the fixed rules, but to find the happiness. Looking for the tasks what makes us happy is not a trivial tasks and the jobs and tasks are taking quite huge amount of our life. therefore, students need to practice to find their predilection tasks and search for their potential ability what make them happy. The same national curriculum is not proper for students to offer time to search their potential occupation and dexterous.
In conclusion, even though the same curriculum until they enter the college have some advantages mentioned in the author's and my 2nd paragraph, the author should consider the benefits of the distinct curriculum optimized to every different student who have different potential of various fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, speaking of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2924.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28752260398 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7167825991 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502712477396 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 17.0 4.99550561798 340% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5013364444 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.130434783 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0434782609 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413344178622 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106954476224 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175124284935 0.0758088955206 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300668723829 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.31112723834 0.0667264976115 466% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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