Education is the source of development of the nation, and if organized properly it will ensure the prosperity and well-being of an etire country. Before entering college students should have basic knowledge of the area they are seeking to specialize in. For an overall intelectual development of a person, I think, basic knowledge of all areas are required. But I also think that there are some subjects that are mandatory for future career development and freedom of choise should not be restrained. That's the reason, why I don't totally agree with a fixed-curriculum system of education. I do belive that the system with free curriculum is more efficient.
First of all, my opinion is based on the cocept of freedom of choise. I think that every person should choose the subject that he/she likes. The most important argument supporting this idea is the motivation. If the person does not like the curriculum, the motivation will be affected, and this will further result in a decline in productivity. But this case is not the perfect one. We should also take into consideration the negative effects this policy is fraught with. It is apparent that some difficultis regarding the choise of the subjects will occur, therefore some regulations are needed in order to guide the students.
The next important point backing my opinin along with the freedom of choise is the personal development. Everyone is going through the path that is chosen by himself, and the freedom of curriculum shapes this path by making it available to choose the subjects according to interests. This is the most productive way of creating speacialists in the field. For example, future mathematicians, economists, engineers, etc. are interested in advancing their mathematical skills. Their knowledge will help them go through difficult problems with ease in their university life, that's why this policy is appealing to me. On the other hand this policy will shape people who are confined to their major fields and are not overally developed. This is the major problem of this incentive.
To conclude, I would like to say that free curiculum is a important factor contributing to development of personality and future career growth, but it has some unfavorable outcomes, which should be thoroughly investigated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14745308311 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93498713088 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530831099196 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.0216442072 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2727272727 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0758276373304 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0211132213946 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292737898785 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0507191379389 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377690973174 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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