The way a country educates it inhabitants is very important to the future of this nation. There are many ways to educate students before they enter in college. Students might follow a national curriculum or a curriculum that varies in forms. While a national curriculum has it positive points, a diversified curriculum has more positive aspects since they allow students to better develop their vocations and to understand better the dynamics of the place where they came from.
One might say that a national curriculum is more appropriate way to educate students before they go to college. A national curriculum allows government to better analyze the quality of the contents offered in the schools. For instance, Brazilian government just changed it educational system to a standardized one, where students learn the same content. In this example, many experts suport the idea implemented in Brazil because in a such a large country it was possible to control the quality of what is teached to pupils. In this sense, instead of spend a high amount of money in controlling what contents teachers are transfering to students the government might spend more resources in the quality of the teaching methods and in the improvement of the national curriculum. Also, a national curriculum is considered by many experts a better way to educate young people that will face national exams in order to enter in college in the final high school year.
However, a standardized curriculum to all students of a country have many negative aspects. Continuing to use to Brazilian example, it's possible to see in this country that many students are not been capable to develop their vocations in school and to develop their abilities before goes to college. That's because a national curriculum doesn't allow students to spend more time learning what they have more interest. If a student that have good abilities in physics wants to spend more time developing his skills before goes to college, probably this students will not be able to do this, considering that this student needs to study the same amount of time to all subjects in school. Moreover, many experts detected that students are not been capable to understand the history and culture from his own region, since they have a standardized material to learn. Brazil is a country with continental proportions and also it has a very diversified culture. In this context, the cultural and historical aspects that are in the standardized books offered by the government in public schools give much more attention to elements related to the areas where there are more inhabitants in the country, such as Rio de Janeiro or Sao Paulo. In this sense, a kid that leaves in a place far away from these two big states might learn only about the culture and historical facts of these states and might not be capable to learn about waht happened in his own state or city.
In conclusion, while one might see positive elements in a national curriculum, it's reckeless to educate kids with a standardized content. The students might have different interests they want to develop more and also this kind of educational system might obliterate part of the culture, history and social specificities within a nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2710.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01851851852 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7460384235 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405555555556 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4009938762 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314076920659 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11953373581 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806164475644 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230358605717 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643970349642 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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