The assertion that all students, up to the age of 18, should study the same national curriculum is conspicuously erroneous. It is easy to undersand why. Let us take the cases of highly successful individuals: Merril Streep and Carlos Slim. As Ms Streep's resume points out, she began formally preparing for a career in theater when she attended high school, as theater was among the classes available to her - and counting toward completion of her formation. On the other hand, Mr Slim-Helu, the renown Mexican billionaire, is an engineer who attended high school at Mexico's oldest university. Back then he was given the opportunity to learn the fundamentals of telecommunications - which later became the source of his wealth, when he bought Mexican giant telecommunications enterprise, Telmex. Both Ms Streep and Mr Slim share a common trait: they were given the opportunity to get acquainted with their passion from an early stage in life.
It may be correctly argued that no story of success is uniquely dependent on what individuals do before young adulthood. After all, it is true that some of the most successful individuals did not began their careers in what later made them successful. One can consider the case of Adolf Hitler, whose early steps as a painter belie what he would become later on. It is, however, necessary that school formation provides an space for children and teenagers to learn what they are passionate about. In order to write a novel, it is necessary for students to first have been given the opportunity to compose a short story and, to that end, it is necessary that composition be among the pool of possible subjects; to swim faster than Ian Thorpe and Michael Phelps, a student should first be given the opportunity to, at least, play waterpolo once in her life.
Finally, while it is true that a minimum degree of standardization is required - studying physics and chemistry, for instance, is highly important today because of the relevance it bears in our day-to-day dealing with electronic devices - this should, by no means, be taken as an obligation to completely standardize study programs: it is one thing to study the fundamentals of physics and chemistry, sure, but it is completely another thing to master its more complex concepts. It is important that subjects such as Arts Appreciation, Physical Education, Theater, Musical Performance, and so on, be given the weight they should be given.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 567, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'Mexicos the oldest'.
Suggestion: Mexicos the oldest
...an engineer who attended high school at Mexicos oldest university. Back then he was given the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 757, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'telecommunications'' or 'telecommunication's'?
Suggestion: telecommunications'; telecommunication's
...is wealth, when he bought Mexican giant telecommunications enterprise, Telmex. Both Ms Streep and ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'begin'
Suggestion: begin
...the most successful individuals did not began their careers in what later made them s...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ecessary that school formation provides an space for children and teenagers to lea...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, while, after all, another thing, at least, for instance, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04207920792 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95750268567 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59900990099 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.399194846 60.3974514979 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.5 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.21951772744 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145875664262 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045188918861 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840122941917 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876906701195 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234797908975 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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