Society evolves at an ever increasing rate since the first industrial revolution. Many issues that we, today, think of as problems were not even remotely considered thirty or fourty years ago. This is the case of the salary gap or the presence of women in top positions in industry and government agencies. That men and women are physically different is, undoubtedly, a true assertion - speaking on the basis of the average individual. However, it can be argued that such differences exist also within genders, which raises the question of whether gender should be the parameter of consideration in judging whether a man or a woman is suited for a certain task.
One of the most important things that a Society that seeks to provide individuals with equal opportunities is to analyze whether a group (i.e. a certain gender, race, or people of a certain faith) are under unequal access to these opportunities. When looking back in history, before all the conveniences that came (and keep coming) with technological advancement, it is possible to see that the weaker individuals (of which, normally, women) depended on the stronger for many vital tasks: hunting, shelter, protection from all kind of dangers. That gave the strongest a position of power over the others. But it is important to acknowledge the extent to which this power still holds. For instance, in corporate jobs, is it still the case that the physically stronger hold the top positions? Certainly not, even if most CEOs are men, this is a condition that prevails because of other factors and not because of women's poor ability to perform at the top of the corporate ladder. Thus, it is important to understand that many differences in the tasks performed by men and women are due to the fact that history gave - perhaps unfairly - unequal power to different groups.
But physical differences are also seen within genders, which makes it questionable whether the ability to perform many tasks is due to the gender or other characteristics. Nutrition, which is highly correlated to income levels, plays an important role in determining the physical strength of a person. As shown in the lattest FAO report, African Americans and African Caribbeans exhibit a higher level of nutrition compared to African Mexicans, who live in a high degree of marginalization. This analysis controls for income levels and reveals that African Caribbeans and African Americans are better suited for tasks that require physical strength, regardless of their gender. So, it is clear that gender alone is not a sufficient feature in assessing whether an individual is suited for some tasks.
In conclusion, gender differences cannot be neglected but are not as important as they used to be before technology made life easier. The strength of men (which is not ubiquitous, because it varies across income levels) is no longer a sufficient reason to support the gender gaps that can be seen today in the labor market, even more so in corporate jobs where physical attributes are not important in the performance of tasks. It is important that Society questions the validity of the physical differences between men and women in order to provide all of its individuals with equal opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 525, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...exist also within genders, which raises the question of whether gender should be the parameter of consi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, still, thus, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.3162921348 230% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2700.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 533.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06566604128 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88714359337 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489681050657 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8186701499 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.65 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219835090252 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650930290981 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400701139585 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139388104706 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217139434072 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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