A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Curriculum plays a central role in educational system. It is the totality of student experiences and dynamics of life learning process. In today’s educational reform, a curriculum reform is very important part. The prompt suggests that nation’s should have a unique curriculum for all schools before college. However, it is too far to say that this recommendation should be accepted for all schools for below reasons.
To begin, not all people have the same abilities and ambitions. On the one hand, some people dream of graduating from the best universities and becoming doctors, lawyers or artists, while the others are satisfied of not having such high level of education and such complex professions. These people are interested in different kinds of craft. They are, for example, hair stylists, manicurists, confectioners, bakers, cooks, meatmen, shoemakers, car electricians or auto mechanics. These occupations require particular skills and knowledge of skilled work lower than college level knowledge. In Eastern Europe, for example, in the former Yugoslavian countries, there are secondary schools for professional artisans in duration of three years. Furthermore, in the same countries, there are secondary schools for technicians in different fields, from medicine, electronics, mechanics to economics which last for four years. In all countries there is a great demand of professionals of this kind, but there are no schools for them. Therefore, these people find easily jobs in many countries, such as Germany. After seeing these examples, it is obvious that there is no much logic in implementing the same curriculum in all schools. Rather, it could be recommended that the other countries should follow the example of Eastern European countries in order to provide high qualified artisans and technicians.
Secondly, there are professions such as music, arts or sports that require talent and dedication since the youngest age. Again, in Eastern Europe, there is a formal education for these professionals. For music, education starts with the primary music school attained in parallel with the regular primary school for eight years. Then, there are secondary schools for music, arts and sports. For professional musician and athletes, it is necessary to make life decision already in their childhood. It is not possible to become a professional violinist or any kind of instrumentalist or sport champion in the secondary school. Since the youngest age, it is very clear if someone can become a musician or an athlete. These professions require everyday work since the youngest age. Since music and sport trainings take many hours a day, it is obvious that curriculum in this special school, cannot be the same as in the other schools. In addition to their instrumental studies, music students start studying all theoretical music subjects and humanities since the secondary school. Music and arts are very broad fields and, for these students would be a waste of time and energy studying same subjects as in the other, regular schools.
Lastly, it is also true that many people do not make life decisions in their youngest age. This is not a generally excepted way of growing. Also, subjects studied in the general schools are relevant to a myriad of professions. That to say, these students, do not just have an opportunity to make decisions about their professions much later than arts or sport students, but by the time they graduate, they are prepared for applying in many different universities. It could be said that, this fact bolsters the recommendation of the prompt above. In the other words, it appears that it is a good idea for these school to have the same national curriculum as this curriculum would be based on the same values, beliefs and educational philosophy characteristic for the nation. Hence, it would instill a national educational standard.
To conclude, the evidence presented in this essay shows that different professions require different types of education. This means that there should be different schools with different curriculum. Reason for this is the fact that, while some professions are more common and, thus more implemented in the general educational system, the others like arts and sport require special schooling and formation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to process
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Suggestion: now
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3626.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 681.0 442.535393258 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32452276065 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10842213422 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91626258973 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443465491924 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1115.1 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 6.24550561798 368% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.38483146067 342% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4303177332 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4054054054 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13513513514 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.83258426966 310% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182102142261 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479089265714 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588926985847 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118760044956 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550052496287 0.0667264976115 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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