A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Education and knowledge is power, unbiased for anyone who wishes to fathom the way things work and innovation stems from when knowledge and creativity are brought together to bring change. Thus, it is imperative that education flows free to all and should not be restricted by any. I am disinclined towards the author's statement that a nation should require a same national curriculum until college. School and students should be given a choice for what curriculum they want as this freedom will bring change, towards a prosperous society.
Education system has long been critisized by students and teachers over the restrictive environment that results in an un-learning experience. Although, the education limits the student it also helps them think in a streamlined direction which is also necessary. Thus, same national curriculum would be disastrous for the freedom of thought, which is absolutely crucial, for innovation. Same curriculum bring less choice and some students will not be able to choose fields that interests them, like, art, horse riding, etc, which even if included in the course will be imposed to people wo might be interested in other activities. Thus, it is crucial to fathom the importance of diversity in curriculum which cannot be given to students by schools if there is same curriculum nation wide.
Diversity breeds skills and this can be seen in many schools which offer different courses. A same curriculum might bring uniformity and justice to students who often travel and some might even counter argument that students cover basic topics that are necessary to understand before higher education can be done with the same curriculum.However, the same can be achieved by choices of curriculum which decide on various topics that are for sure to be a part fundamentally and also do not rebuke freedom of students for what helps them with thinking and understanding different fields. Skills are developed when they are worked on with passionately and when freedom is given and not imposed.
To sum, the author is right about the uniformity and ease given by same nation wide curriculum but the freedom of choice can be beneficial in long term. Education is beneficial when freedom breeds passion and innovation with it. If the same curriculum cover these it might be worth it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15119363395 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79808036092 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485411140584 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 101.375122962 60.3974514979 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.466666667 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1333333333 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.13333333333 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284437255737 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113371524548 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116362038636 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193261630168 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066094455628 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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