Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
This topic raises the issue whether Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain. Indisputably any nation would want to progress and strenghten its economic position as well as undertake new tasks to add to its development. Nevertheless, in our haste of achieving greatness, we have turned a blind eye towards the natural ecosystem and it needs to be protected. Thus i would agree with the opinion that policies should be made by the nations to preserve wilderness even if it comes at the cost of losing out on economic gain.
First of all i would like to point out the huge impact a balanced ecosystem has on the planet. Everything that we eat, wear and consume comes from nature and wilderness. Nations have built themselves on the resources that was provided by the nature. Over exploitation of natural resources has lead to huge imbalance and as its consequece the weather patterns around the world have shifted,glaciers are melting faster, the global temperature has risen and many species of plants and animals have gone extinct. In these circumstances, obviously the nations have to create policies that aim at reducing the damage humans have done to the nature. To illustrate my point i would like to cite the Paris Accord where most of the developed nations that have a huge carbon footprint pledged to reduce their carbon emmissions alongside helping other developing nations to shift towards more sustainable production and manufacturing . Although this has been more economically draining for the developed countries, it has established a precedent for all the world that rescuring and preserving what we have is very important.
Admittedly economic gain ultimately adds to the development of the nation and it is true especially in the case of developing nation where each and every bit contributes towards the economy and welfare, however it is the moral and ethical obligation of humans to nuture for the environment. Implementing the policy will add to the rich bio diversity of the nation. In a country like india where forests are home to in numerable species of endangered plants and animals, a policy to preserve forests will ensure these animals and plants thrive. Apart from this, the menancing issue of poaching and smuggling of animal parts as well as trees will be curbed. Declaring a forest reserved area or constructing a policy that ensures a portion of the nation will be covered by forest is an excellent way of generating income for indegenous populations as well as an avenue for eco tourism. Taking all these factors into consideration having strong ploicies to preserve wilderness looks like a good move on the part of nations.
In conclusion although economic gains are important, they should not be the only factors in deciding for policies on preserving natural forests. The advantages of having a balanced ecosystem far outweigh the advantages of economic gain. We are looking out for future generations by setting up laws to ensure remaining wilderness thrives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, thus, well, apart from, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2603.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10392156863 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86126154093 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503921568627 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 843.3 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4022935378 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.15 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437498809711 0.243740707755 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123593522587 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174845115459 0.0758088955206 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289372522696 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176828541398 0.0667264976115 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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